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absolute sacrifice burns
in candles of fairy tales
i lift my eyes
to the flickering
of your mouth
  "eat the whole

                of me"

bound my ankles
and delay my desire
as you separate
the dull and still
i have no voice today
put my hands over the flame
i will not cry
like the great tongue
of resurrection

i utter emptiness
in my roots
pulling on my bones
and severing
this spell

of stiletto's


i am dull
and still
under the glass
of you
the third person is calling
cleaning my cells

rubbed against the old
i crumble dried flowers
and wait for complicating
features that resound

tomorrow awaits
with the syllables
of a maniac
and i speak
to the ivory
through
enameled sins
"fuck

simple pleasures"

the obscene language of latin
calls out to god
climbing angrily
in the noise of silence
i am still
with squares of the quilt
and guilt
that cover
dull pain
i am a grid
of skin and blood

stretching
that other person
into the border of manic
my temporary smile
is absolute

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 










 

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  • misselaineous
    July 13, 2008
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    yes


  • Rowan gold member
    July 13, 2008

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    Wow. Now this I like.
    So many lines made me shiver; with envy or a deeper sense of longing, not sure. lol. I read this out loud and it all fell into place naturally for me. Loved onerios comment: "your writes are like sweet pickles buried under some far off Scottish loam knee deep in faerie dust and happy mushrooms:" lol. That's great.
    Thanks for entering this.


  • Lj-
    July 12, 2008

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    I liked this a lot.
    Especially:
    ' tomorrow awaits
    with the syllables
    of a maniac
    and i speak
    to the ivory
    through
    enameled sins
    "fuck
    simple pleasures" '

    Best of luck.


  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    July 11, 2008
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    holy fuck.


  • apples fell
    July 11, 2008

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    You are so good. I can see onerios in your writing, which is probably why you love her so much, huh? I only have one critical observation and it's just hearsay really, but here I go. I think "the" before "dull pain" in the second to last stanza can go. I find the beginning of the poem and the "s" sounds to be overwhelming. Maybe you might consider putting it like this:
    "absolute sacrifice burns
    in fairy tales"
    - You don't need the candles I think. You can assume from burning alone. That's it. The rest of your piece is strong. I will stop back into your work tomorrow, after I sleep.

    Great to reconnect again.

    Lovely.

    ;


  • onerios13
    July 11, 2008

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    i lift my eyes
    to the flickering
    of your mouth
    "eat the whole

    of me"


    Oh how this made this little kitty purr...

    I don't know what it is about you, but your writes are like sweet pickles buried under some far off Scottish loam knee deep in faerie dust and happy mushrooms:

    In a word...they just taste better and better with time.

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