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Honesty, Trust, Friendship

Don't speak to me in the future
I don't want to hear your voice.
You talk to me like I'm the one with the faults.
Like I'm the one with the problem.
You told me you'd be honest
You told me I had nothing to worry about.
You were just good friends
I was told I should trust.

Why trust the dishonest?
Why should I trust your lieing words
Your heart is about as cold as the artic snow.
You weren't there for me
You were not the one I thought you were.

She was my best friend,
You were my love.
I had suspicions.
You told me over and over again
I was paranoid, neurotic.
You make me sick!

I put my self through hell for you,
Thought it was all my fault.
You let me think I was the one to blame.
Shame is not your game.
I will rightfully win this battle with you,
My unfaithful love for which,
Days ago I would of given my life.

Now all I want to do is see you,
See you in the pain you put me through.
I hope your heart is ripped out by another.
The other one,
The one you left me for.

 Do You Regret Your Decision?


To give up everything we worked for.
To just let me slip away,

To let what I thought was happiness disappear.

 

Don't bother coming back here,

because I won't bother caring.

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Thought I'd enter.. only becuase i have alot of emotion going through me today.. hope you like the poem.

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  • Kikkichick
    July 12, 2008
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    Thank you for the advice and for the compliments, both of you.


  • etoile
    July 11, 2008

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    lieing --> lying
    my self --> myself
    would of --> would have

    apart from those spelling mistakes i can really see the emotion put into this

    "Your heart is about as cold as the artic snow."
    i loved that line

    "Do You Regret Your Decision?"
    i'm not sure if this was done purposely or not but i liked how you capitilized the words in that line. it added a nice emotional touch

    thanks and goodluck


  • aanika
    July 11, 2008
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    okay, first things first.
    i accept that you wrote this while you were emotional,
    but please please please fix your spelling and grammar and punctuation.
    also, you've used so many phrases that have been used before and lack imagery. i personally prefer more original poems.
    you're lucky i'm not the only judge.