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You Must Be Blind

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I look in your eyes and wonder what you see
Coz when I look in the mirror all I see is me
All my flaws and my imperfections
Are all that’s there in the reflection

 

I’m not that tall and in no great shape
Just a few rungs above the jungle ape
There is no way I’m your ideal man
I don’t deserve to even hold your hand

 

Chorus:
So lemme look into your eyes
I wanna go deep inside
Whatcha ya see when ya look at me?
Tell me whatcha feel
So I know it’s real
It may be obvious but it’s not to me

 

I wear my hair longer than you like
When I don’t shave I must be a lovely sight
I haven’t worked out since who-knows-when
Yet somehow I remain somewhat thin

 

When I’m with you my imperfections dissolve
Somehow you can look beyond all my faults
I haven’t a clue as to whatcha see in me
So get your eyes checked, you’re as blind as can be

 

 

Author notes

Just a goofy love song I wrote some years ago, now serves as poetic entertainment!

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  • Brilliant Blonde22
    January 8
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    I loved it! It made able to relate sorta, but im not a man!! lol

  • piccola silver member
    August 12, 2008
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    this is great! It reminds me (the graphic) of when I went to get an exam for contacts. My best friend with me and she sat there telling me the letters on the chart. The doctor almost lost his mind and made her leave the room lol. Anyway, I really like the write and thank you for the entry.


  • sailor ptolema
    July 23, 2008

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    "I’m not that tall and in no great shape
    Just a few rungs above the jungle ape
    There is no way I’m your ideal man">>>> I'm learning about primates in my Anthropology class...we are more closely related to chimps though


    but;..hahaha . This was cute and funny. The only reason I'm not lambasting on the grammar is the fact that it's a song; so I'll allow it

    thanks for entering and g'luck!

    -sailor ptolema


    • Xianaria gold member
      July 23, 2008
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      i gots good grammar, whatcha talkin bout?


      • sailor ptolema
        July 23, 2008
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        . Like I said; this only works as song lyrics. Had this been a strict poem, I would have ripped the grammar apart lol (in the most surgically sterile way )


  • daviscth silver member
    July 20, 2008
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    Thanks.....


  • Fourthaxis
    July 17, 2008

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    Wow!! Amazing! Its so funny and sarcastic totally love it!! I am in complete awe of this, so good! Thats one hell of a poem!

    "I look in your eyes and wonder what you see
    Coz when I look in the mirror all I see is me"
    Honestly?
    Jungle Ape??? Really? Why Jungle Ape though?

    "I haven’t worked out since who-knows-when
    Yet somehow I remain somewhat thin"
    Now, this is something that I can relate to! I mean, some people just have a high metabolic rate you know! And I hate it when people don't appreciate my genes!
    Kick-ass ending!

    You must have a great sense of humour which you have managed to express in this poem splendidly or you are an awesome poet, either way this is pure genius, a work of art!! Totally hilarious!!
    Cheers! Hope you win something!!

    Anansey



  • notorious gold member
    July 11, 2008

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    "Just a few rungs above the jungle ape
    There is no way I’m your ideal man
    I don’t deserve to even hold your hand"
    LMAO!!!
    A jungle ape? What a simile...it's hilarious. =D

    The whole thing is just...hilarious. =D

    Good luck


    • Xianaria gold member
      July 11, 2008
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      lol thank you yeah, i was in a strange self-depreciating mood when i wrote this.


  • KayJay
    July 11, 2008

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    What a hoot! Very amusing (in a kind of uncomfortable way - too close to the truth perhaps?). Excellent entry and I'm sure Sailor will enjoy this with her Rice Krispies (yuk! )
    Ken

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