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my never ending pain

i wook up in pain
not in my arm
and not in neck
but in my heart
I was falling apart
he had put me in pain
waving the love in my face
the love i would never gain
to lay there
and cry
was all i wanted to do
cry cry cry
i just wanted to to die
then and there
everything i tell you

makes me relive

all the pain

that i'm still in
it is making it so real

i just want to

is lie here and cry

i'll cry myself to sleep tonight

but it's nothing diffrent

it's all the same

its always the same

 

Author notes

this did realy happen he broke my heart and for days i cryed i was always crying i was dieing inside and to this day i still cry myself to sleep at night

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  • ResplendentCloud
    July 15, 2008

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    wow this is really emotional and DEEP. it seriously brought tears to my eyes. I know how you feel, this jerk that broke my friends heart also broke mine. very good write
    good luck

  • Rowan gold member
    July 13, 2008

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    heartache is the worse kind of pain. I don't know if all the repetition of words works for me; in, i's, love, cry...
    I think this is a little cliche, as in this has been written like this before. Sorry don't mean to be cruel, especially to someone who is wounded. honest.
    Needs a little more work, a fresh look. But I do know the pain of this, and I'm truly sorry you're feeling like this.

    Thanks for entering hon.