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Refreshing Water

Taste the water as it comes from my mouth,
Taste the lies as they fall through the cracks.

See the deceit as I laugh around my deck,
See my eyes as they turn laughing at your foolishness.

I care not for your life,
I care only for myself.

You look at me and see a lie,
I look at you and see myself.

You look at you and see the truth,
I look at me and find your lies.

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Picture Prompt: http://allpoetry.com/images/ext/Contest/2413/305.jpg?1215814917

A contest entry

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  • MichaelBe
    July 27, 2008

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    Nice write, I like the way you have stuck to a theme and used repetition of ideas effectively and I also enojyed the way you have taken the prompt.

    Thanks for entering,

    Michael


    • Kimojuno
      July 28, 2008
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      Thanks for holding the contest and commenting. =)


  • xSarahx
    July 19, 2008

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    Jeff!!! I love this! It's really strong and your words flow like water, (no pun intended) creating a picture in the mind! Good luck in the contest buddy!