Born free and taxed to death
Tears of dust are cried
in the founding fathers graves.
Restfully, they lie sleeping no more.
The fall of the American empire
they could not have foretold.
The land of promise
has broken its word
rendering worthless its bond.
The constitution cries freedom no more.
Bedfellows of the Apostles creed
for they change more than God’s weather.
A government for and by the people is gone.
Our beloved country the most glorious of whores.
She is the proxy of a rotten corporate America.
Land of the richer aspiring to fiefdom
herding the down trodden into serfdom.
A fatted cow for the slaughter
lays down for Allahs oil!
The earth cries freedom
From a virus called humanity
The United States of America
mantles the disgrace of patient zero.
The first stone in the pond
echoing the waves of social cancer
heard around this God given world.
How can I love a Country
that doesn’t love itself?
Jesus wept!
Author notes
I love America, but not the goverment! So don't get it twisted
I am not Anti-American I'm Anti-Goverm
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- Anti-American Poetry PW by Tivoli.
600 points, ended July 28, 2008, 16 entries
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Bronze trophy winner
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925 points, ended January 1, 18 entries
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700 points, ended January 24, 7 entries
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We need to stand up for what we beleive in - For the land founded on Freedom
Where we may not agree with each other - but we defend your right to express it. -
thought provoking write
thank you for entering my contest
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Well written and far too true, except for taxed to death, in my opinion. We may disagree on part of the reasons but the results are the same. Thanks for entering.
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Good write and good insight into this economic mess we are in...thanks for sharing your thoughts!
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A fatted cow for the slaughter
lays down for Allahs oil!
strongly spoken truths throughout, but the above was just soo damn to the point.
nods at the notes. yes, the land itself I honor and respect. the fools governing fools I cannot. the soldiers who have served past and present I salute, those who give false orders poisoned with greed I salute one finger at a time !
Best of luck in the contest.
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pretty great poem!
STRONG POINT!
Our country is going down the drain...it's gotten worse over the years. not just one leader, but combination of several leaders.
God Bless the USA. hopefully we'll repent as a nation before the Wrath of God is upon us.
*EDIT: please put "I went to narnia" in yer author's notes so I know you read the rules, thanks,
God Bless,
ZeInkslinger
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I'm not sure what rule I am breaking, could you please be a little more specific.
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i think he means the whole "i went to Narnia" bullshit in the notes.
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I loved your poem. Speaking as a non-American, it seems difficult these days to separate America and Amercans - after all, your once great nation managed to elect GW Prick twice running and, so far as I know, has yet to run but one stinking banking thief out of his crumble-down town. It has also given the world about 87 series of Friends and more 24's than there are hours in a month. As for Lost - you bet! But like I said, I loved your poem and I'm nominating you for President. You shine a truthful light at the end of the tunnel - it just may be a universe long.
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Congratulations!
You get the bronze.
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ummm Hmm you know I think this was one of the poems you read and then you have to read again just to let it sink in just what you feel about it.
The Positives:
This was really great. I think you should your opinions and emotion in such a unique way. It really was a fasinating poem.
Room For Improvement:
One thing I saw that was just a bit off i wanted you to look at real quick:
"Restfully, they lie sleeping no more."
This just doesn't sound quite right.
My Favorite Part:
A government for and by the people is gone.
Our beloved country the most glorious of whores.
She is the proxy of a rotten corporate America.
I think you nailed it! I am so moving to Canada lol
Overall:
I give this an 9/10 you did great.
~*~Apathetic Poison~*~
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Adding you to finalists list.
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A government for and by the people is gone.
I would ask was it ever a government of and for the people since the turn of the 20th century?
No government acts for the people, if they did there would be no war, no conflict, no starvation,power corrupts and absolute power corrupts all, too many governments have this power "in the name of the people".
Until "WE THE PEOPLE" stop fawning over the words of sacharrine mouthed devils destitution for all will be the order of the day.
Nice poem by the way just felt like having a rant
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You couldn't speak truer words if you tried! The ruination of our country can be laid right at the doorsteps of corporate America and the crooks that run them.. Well done!
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Very nicely written! You had a great intro! One of the best I've read honestly. A little ranty here and there. But thats just what I like to see! Great write on an important issues that no one feels should be talked about. Thanks for entering! Good luck!
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I love the poem... but it was already entered into my previous contest and while this does not eliminate you from winning points with it, it doesn't really seem fair to the other entrants if I were to place this in at the top. I guess I would have to see what else is submitted.
It's up to you... you can stick with this beautifully worded piece or enter a different pre write or 2 fresh writes.
Although I must say that this should be sent to the appropriate governemnt officials and maybe even take up some space in the local section of a newspaper.
It is very moving and has a way of getting people thinking.
Seriously great write!
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I agree also. This is well written and the language really fit here. The images were vivid and very interesting. I'm happy about Obama though I see hope and change in our future because of that. I hope that he can fix our government and stop a lot of the corruption or at least make headway.
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A government for and by the people is gone.
Our beloved country the most glorious of whores.
She is the proxy of a rotten corporate America
I agree.
I love the promise of America but find only heartache and disgust in our government.
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Oh my....
This is a potent piece...but for the expletive *bunny* word this is right on in view of the current political & economic upheaval we're in. I hope when I give you clappys they come up 'cause I just hit the wrong dang key again when I just started this comment. I hate it when I do that...there's only one line that has me confused about this & I'll ask you about that later. So..our founding Fathers aren't resting in their dusty state eh? 
I guess not. I like the last line. Yahshua sure did weep! 
I have to talk to Kevin about this...when we hit the wrong key as we're leaving a comment & then edit the clappys should register & they don't! I want to leave you points for this! 
Here: not the same but I meant well...
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This is a very stand out-ish piece, I love someone who is not afraid to tackle the darker side of humanity and politics, you have done it very well. Best to you
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Potent stuff here...
the voice impacts and the focus does
not waver. I especially found "the most glorious of whores" an intense wording. Best to you with this.
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well penned for the prompt . . liked "The Constitution cries freedom no more" and "herding the down trodden into serfdom" . . unfortunately, small biz can be very dishonest as well . . congrats on the trophy . .
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*nods* Great Job! I like a bit more fire in my anti-government, and a little less God, but your articulate piece is very well done and a worthy poem!
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Well Done!
It's about time somebody took their star spangled blinkers off and faced the facts the end of American
Imperialism is in sight.They failed to overthrow the
freely elected government of venezuela they failed in their many attempts to murder Castro.they are encouraging the Iraelis to nuke the neuclear power
installations in Iran.They've alienated the Russians
By surrounding them with bases need I go on.Nice Poem
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Sounds like the voice of a patriot to me... Dissent is the hallmark of a free society... in spite of what's being done to us... Well spoken.
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Best poem I've reas so far in this contest. You adressed mnay problems in a fair and interesting way.
I loved the picture of
'A fatted cow for the slaughter
lays down for Allahs oil!'
and i loved the stanza that talked of the govenment beign a proxy.
Just one question, did omega refer to the end?
Good Luck,
Rob
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