I could feel cold chills run down my spine as my heart ceased in beat
The scent of that one rose I kept dear has concluded its embrace
My darling held me close as I took my final breath
He held me so close, enough to feel my pulse fade
My spirit still lingers here with my cold dead body
As an accompanied soul wanders in the truth so muddy
Bleeding life forces strolling through, beneath the velvety sky so slightly blue
The stormy clouds erupt above in perfect timing for lost love,
For the charming gentleman’s mourning moment,
for his beloved lover, lost forever
As he looked up, cherubs shared their tears onto the land,
Whilst violins and harps played a tune to a fresh new corpse,
Queued for afterlife salvation
Author notes
picture credit: Earth Blood by Zardo
A contest entry
- The Beautiful Dark by Spiritual Soul.
1300 points, ended July 22, 2008, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Pre writes galore! by Lady Michaella.
850 points, ended July 16, 2008, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Anything and Everything Silvosian Member's Contest by Pixielated.
900 points, ended August 6, 2008, 13 entries
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Comments
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a very deep piece of work i love how you use your words in all your poems great work
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I agree with Pixies referance to gothic literature, thats the firs thing that popped into my mind after reading this, Nice use of vocabulary, thanks for entering, and best of luck.
Elle
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A very pretty gothic-like piece. (as in Gothic literture, not as in just waring all black) Sad, but with pretty word pictures, so I enjoyed the read.
Thanks for entering.
Pixie
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Brilliant poem. thanks for entering.
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you have a way with darkness... and I love it so much. I miss writing dark poetry.
It was lines like: "My spirit still lingers here with my cold dead body" ---that kept me
captivated.
your an amazing writer! I wish you the best of luck on with the contest.
blessed be
Blanche
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Dying is never really a fun thing. Your poem expressed so much emotion through the power of words. I like how you ended it, with the baby angels sharing ones tears and muscial redemptious bliss. Great write.
Silvos.
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wow so dark and sad, I loved the second part of the poem, it was so poetic and beautiful, in a dark way. Thanks for your entry!!
Blessings,
~Michaela~
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