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Unpercieved power,

Stirs swiftly around the earth.

Transporting energy,

Evolving,rebirth.

 

 

Glimpse of dimensions,

Heavenly sphere.

Vigilant matter,

Energy adhered.

 

 

Dormant matter,

Recycles soul.

Recur to physical,

Orbits to grow.

 

 

Pure energy,

Returns to source.

Alpha and omega,

Balancing coarse.

 

What is now,

Has always been.

Steps towards perfection,

Begining to End.  

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Pisces rainbow (picture Energy Beam by Hirden)

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  • aboomer silver member
    September 17, 2008
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    Great wording! I really like the depth in this. I would have a hard time picking a favorite verse - but your ending is perfect

    'What is now,
    Has always been.
    Steps towards perfection,
    Begining to End. '

    Thank you for this lovely entry.
    best wishes in the contest


  • islekine gold member
    September 17, 2008

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    Wow...another wonderful take!!

    This is a very enjoyable contest, but it is going to be a tough one to judge!! Thanks so much for your wonderful entry...Best wishes in the contest!
    Write on!


  • maa gold member
    August 9, 2008

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    I love the way you speak of universal truth in such a simple and appealing manner ... I have always held the idea dear to my heart that true wisdom does not scream, nor does it use sophisticated words ... you show us that it is possible to combine poetic tools with gracefulness and to teach a spiritual lesson without righteousness ...
    I honor your intuitive wisdom and humility and cherish your being,


    maa


  • storiesuntold gold member
    August 7, 2008
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    Great piece here

    Spoken so truthfully and with great disire for life in its most loving ways


  • Dark Otter
    July 29, 2008

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    a universal stream of consciousness

    flows into the substandard planes of reality creating a astral blast of thought that wakens the sleeper from his perceived state of dormancy. Its a prose style that I like I wish that you would take it deeper. If the thoughts flowed better, it would become a better read. I really love the picture at the top. It is a stairway to enlightenment. "'Seek first ye the kingdom of heaven and all shall be given to you'. 'If thine eye is single thy whole body shall be filled with light'". Thank you for a thought provoking piece.

  • Ace - LightWithinMe
    July 27, 2008
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    Hello Pisces Rainbow. I saw your entry in this contest, and thought I would wish you luck in it. My regards.


  • theredcatjazzoflove gold member
    July 22, 2008

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    this was nice here thanks for entering have a very nice day and good luck to you in the contest here


  • stavykm gold member
    July 19, 2008
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    Oh I Loved This

    You did a beautiful job on this poem. This is very deep and so true in the world and life that we live!! Yes the Alpha & Omega. I loved your whole perception of the world of energy. Best of luck to you in the contest. Thank you so much for sharing with me.
    Many Blessings
    Kelle Marie


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    July 13, 2008

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    Humm..so true and so thought provoking theory of your verse..well done....Thank you so much for entering my contest..my friend...


  • Providence
    July 12, 2008

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    what has been, is now and will always be!

    This just sings out to the Eternal!

    Ovations!

    Marianne

  • Ace - LightWithinMe
    July 12, 2008

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    Hello.

    An interesting write, I do agree with some of what you say, but then again, doesn't matter if I agree or disagree, none of my business. Have to say that at times your rhyme is tight, but then in stanza five non existent, which I find strange because everywhere else it rhymes. This is a good write though, hard to convey and rhyme with so few words per line. Thought I would mention, there is an "e" missing of your "glimpse" 2nd stanza. Best of luck in the contest.

    My regards.


  • Malabu
    July 11, 2008

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    I love the truth in this...and it sings to me..vibrant and as much soul filling...the world and nature...perhaps are the closest thing to perfection...love the write
    Mal


  • AsIThink gold member
    July 11, 2008
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    Excellent reflections here. You have touched very nicely on the sublimeness of the higher matters in life. The background is great and the feeling generated by this is strong. My fav lines are your opening ones:

    "Unpercieved power,

    Stirs swiftly around the earth.

    Transporting energy,

    Evolving,rebirth." This was a wonderful use of time and energy.

  • goalsv
    July 11, 2008
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    Amen! A great idea for the prompt. Very good rhythem and metephor.

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