You’re just like a faucet; you’re hot and cold.
It’s like having two faces that never get old.
And in these two faces lie anger and hate
but these two emotions you can never get straight.
You talk about others behind their back
making moral character the trait you lack.
Now don’t get me wrong, I thought you were nice
until our friendship was the price.
You only care about what’s good for you
I guess that’s why our friendship is through.
Out of your mouth spouts a river of negativity,
and down the side of your face, your soul, in captivity.
You’ll do anything to be the center of attention;
Binging and drinking just to ease the tension.
You don’t care anymore, you’ve pushed me aside.
You’ve made some new friends in which you can confide.
You’ve burnt the soap and made it melt,
Did you even ask me how I felt?
No you didn’t, because you don’t see
that your real best friend is simply me.
Now you’re giving me water that’s cold,
and your faces now are getting old.
I see through you and your faces two,
so I guess it’s time I find somebody new.
Somebody new with one, simple face
who acts the same, no matter the place.
Someone who doesn’t act totally lame;
by pointing the finger and shifting the blame.
It’s pretty harsh, but I guess you are your mother’s daughter.
Now I’ve got to run you down the drain like foggy tap water.
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Contest Poem based on a picture of a human faucet.
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Interesting metaphors some real emotions swirling through dear poet ..you have a good heart ..you read it in your work ..keep the faith ...even this Aussie thinks yah good kid and real kewl...great write so keep the faith
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Very strong piece, with seemingly vast amounts of emotion poured into it. A great rythm with a nicely executed rhyme.
Thanks for entering,
Michael
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:D :thumbs up: :D
This poem is written quite well, it speaks from the heart and shows your emotions. I love how you rhyme every two lines together, although I do see what looks like a typo: "I see through you and your faces two," is that meant to be 'too'? I get that the person has two faces, one hot and one cold, but that seems to be a typo. Also, by the way, I love the last line: "Now I’ve got to run you down the drain like foggy tap water." .. like foggy tap water!
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Hey Jeff... thanks for the comment! Actually it's not a typo, (I knew someone would ask me!) I reread it very carefully to make sure it made sense with two and not too. I wanted to remind the reader (better yet, STRESS the fact) that the person is two-faced that I'm talking about. I'm glad you enjoyed it!
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Okay. :D
I wasn't sure because it does make sense to the poem, but I didn't want to assume it wasn't a typo.
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You're awesome
You should know me, I'm anal about typos rofl....
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