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Why

Hold my hand
'cause we're losing everything.
I can't go on,
not while I'm bleeding.
Don't make me scream,
I can't breathe.
So why won't you
just tell me?

  Chorus:
Why did you have to go
and make my life a living hell?
Why did you bring your self down,
and me with it?
I've lost you, I can't feel you're breathing anymore,
maybe it's 'cause I'm already,
out you're door.
  End Chorus

I don't understand you,
you came from no-where.
I felt so close-still can't understand,
we've lost everything.

What about what we had?
Can't you get that through you're head?
We were ment for each other...
(screams) Don't want any other
    (chorus)

(whispers)Why do I feel this way?...
(steadily gets louder each consecutive verse)
Why do I...feel this way?
Why do I...feel this way?
(Screams) Why do you act this way?!!!

    (Chorus)

(softly) In the end, we were already done,
I never reall expected you, to be the one.
In the end, you're already gone,
I've got to pick up the pieces,
from the ground.
These bloody shards protrude from me,
I'm surprised, you can't see.
In the end we're broken.

    (Chorus)


Author notes

Obviously ment as a rock/screamo.

A contest entry

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Comments


  • Shydreamer3
    July 11, 2008

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    i absolutely loved this poem it was so unique and i loved the flow. thank u for ur comment on my poem by the way. keep on writing and im going to keep on reading.


  • Brandan Shamaya
    July 11, 2008
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    i like it, very heavy sounding, thanks for entering