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A Killing Smile

flash in the darkest night
silver weaves through the crowd
and mingles in veins...
cuts across skin and bones –
heart is slain
all space and heat in between
collide -
two gazes from afar
but minds fly together and close
through the crush of strobe-lit bodies-
not a stranger
but the one who knows what is disguised
behind the cool mirror of eyes...

Author notes

written while listening to a 30 second sample of 'Disco Science' by Mirwais...pure imagination/sensuality...don't know if i really like this one or not.
**update 3/24/04 - okay, i've decided i like this one. **

(to hear 30 seconds of 'Disco Science,' go to mirwaisonline.com, click on US, then click on music at the top. then click on one of the formats next to Disco Science).
Written January 6th, 2004

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  • thelonewolfsong
    April 18, 2005
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    your an excellent writer. i love the rhythm and continuous flow of your poem and it touches a very dark place in my heart.why i couldn't tell you quite honestly.

  • stenise22
    November 11, 2004
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    This poem reminded me of those little slivers of glass that get under you skin and you can't rinse them away...painfull of annoyance. I don't know if that is where that was going or intended, but its good. Significant to heart breaking?


  • forgottentreasure
    February 10, 2004
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    this is truly stirring!! i decided to read some of yours since you were so kind towards me. layers upon layers, and none of them in the least bit shallow. great write!!


  • cubert
    February 1, 2004
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    hmm...I am going to have to hear that song, because this piece gets me in a personal way...very groovy. Excellent piece; makes me think and smile.


  • pastiche
    February 1, 2004
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    Outstanding

    Delicious! This moment doesn't happen very often but when it does and that little indefinable something clicks... You've caught it like a camera, beautifully.
    "but the one who knows what is disguised
    behind the cool mirror of eyes..." is quite breathtaking.

    Takes a heart to know a heart, a mind to know a mind... Smile...
    Excellent write!


  • Aradia Air
    January 31, 2004
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    I really like this poem. It has depth to it, and it really shows. It's truly great!

  • mavalvenk
    January 14, 2004
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    Thank you, kind words, spelt with a fine meaning..smile

  • mavalvenk
    January 13, 2004
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    intoxicating..that lovely smile..very nice poem


  • Kalima
    January 8, 2004
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    That was a beautiful write. I really enjoyed reading it. I think you did an excellent job in writing from imagine27


  • No doubt
    January 6, 2004
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    i really likethis great write
    keep it up
    secret


  • yumanbeing
    January 6, 2004
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    i thought this was original and elegant - Disco of Science - must have been sick that day and missed it in class - will have to read more of yours -

  • prarna
    January 6, 2004
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    hmm...pretty neat! and wonderful of you to share it with us1
    take care and a happy new year to you too...shll be looking forward to more writes from you.

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