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If I Could Talk To Chocolate

If I could talk to chocolate
I'd say Hi there How do you do?
I am so glad that I am me
And really glad you're you!

He said "My name
Is really sweet;
My name is also
Yummy to eat.

I was born in a factory,
Live on a shelf.
That's my life,
So how 'bout yourself?"

"I live like a wild man,
Run round and round.
I love to eat candy,
The sight, smell, and sound."

We talked for a while,
But then I got thinking
About hunger and thirst
Eating and drinking.

I started to look
And stopped listening
I think while he was talking
He also was glistening.

I wanted to eat him,
But decided I wouldn't
Knowing that he could talk,
Well, I just couldn't.

I love eating chocolate
But I like even better
When we talk for an hour
While he's knitting a sweater.


Author notes

I love chocolate. I'll never be able to look at a chocolate bar the same though.....

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  • FloridaGatorQueen silver member
    August 17

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    LOL This is really funny. I am a chocoholic. I love all things chocolate. I enjoyed the read!!! Thank you for entering my contest.


  • Kathraina silver member
    July 21

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    I used to be obsessed with chocolate, but I think I overdosed on it when I was little
    Fantastic job with this write!
    Bravo




    ♥ Kate


  • trekkergirl
    July 14

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    I like the way that you gave chocolate a life of all its own. Great job. Thanks for sharing this with us. And thanks for entering this into my contest.


  • spiritraven
    June 15

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    Oh My

    You have brought chocolate to life in such a delicious fashion. I may think twice before I bite into that next bar of chocolate. So much imagery and the kicker is he was knitting a sweater. Well done


  • DramaQueen469 gold member
    June 3

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    LOL, this is absolutely gorgeous!
    Thankyou so much for entering, and I wish you the best of luck!

    Maria


  • DolceVito gold member
    November 28, 2008

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    LMAO

    Thank you for entering this highly creative write...Come here, chocolate.


  • wolfwatcher
    November 26, 2008

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    lol, at first my hopes were not high. Than I read, and it made me laugh. I definitely enjoyed it. Well done!!!


  • Haygood gold member
    November 26, 2008
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    You have a knack...

    for the weird. I like it! Makes me want to read more. Keep it up...(like you wouldn't)


  • A-Solitary-Fantasy
    September 5, 2008

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    Awesome!

    Really creative,if i could talk to chocolate I'd say, "I'm gonna eat you" and if it could talk I bet it would say, "not if I eat you first!"


  • PatheticKt
    August 20, 2008

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    Haha, I thought there would be "cannibalism" here but you proved me wrong
    I like how the conversation flowed so well and the last line: genius, haha
    Not much to say here, it was quite a nice write, hehe ~


  • Melissa Burns
    August 6, 2008

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    THANK YOU FOR ENTERING MY CONTEST You must forgive my tardiness as I've had comp issues in judging! Thanks, good luck!!!!!!!!!!


    I just wish my chocolate would break up with me so I could be skinny again cute!


  • nevadapoet
    August 2, 2008
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    Great Job

    Very creative...great flow. Excellent. Good luck in the contest.


  • just weak hands
    August 2, 2008

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    if chocolate was sitting there, it wouldn't be there if i came near it ! xD ha ha ha you must have a knack for writing strange, humorous poems huh ? it really works for you though ! lol great write ! loved it ! if this was my contest, i think you would place :]


  • xXxIceQueenxXx
    July 30, 2008

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    Weird but funny poem. This is the second one about chocolate that's been entered into my contest!!

    Thanks for entering!


  • RainbowSky
    July 29, 2008

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    it was different, and unique and really cool. but i dont think it made me cheer up, just smile. thank you for entering and good luck. kudos for the individuality


  • Crazy9Piano8Freak
    July 28, 2008

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    This is funny! I love this and the idea... Where did you come up with this! it's hilarious! I love the creativity and it flows quite nicely. Good job!!!

  • ecrivain01
    July 28, 2008

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    Hmmmmm ...

    It's clever at any rate. No chance of a trophy here, but it's not a bad children's poem.

    Thanks for entering.

  • FloridaGatorQueen silver member
    July 18, 2008
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    LMBO This is such a funny poem. I love chocolate too. Never held a conversation with it. LOL Except when it disagreed with me. Enjoyed the read! Thank you for entering my contest.


  • Slick99
    July 18, 2008

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    TOTALLY

    it would be so TOTALLY awesome if we could talk to chocolate!!! i'm a chocolate fan!!! go chocolate!!!! -slick99


  • DolphinLass silver member
    July 16, 2008
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    haha very well written, I especially liked the part about knitting , and I love chocolate, good luck in my contest and thanks for entering

  • GreySquirrel
    July 11, 2008

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    I loved this poem, it made me laugh out loud! I particularly enjoyed the gradual change in thought:
    I started to look
    And stopped listening
    I think while he was talking
    He also was glistening.

    Good luck in the contest!

  • summore
    July 11, 2008

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    A fun read. Conversation with chocolate while knitting a sweater certainly opens a door of imagination. I like this one very much. Very well done.

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