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Silent Symphonies

Tears cannot fall.
Not this time.

The bittersweet melody
Caught in her steady breath.
Confidence & sorrow
Entangles in her soul.
Unable to let go of the past,
Yet trying so hard to
Hide from it.

Her silent symphonies ring
Clear in her troubled mind.

Her audience missing from

What she physically sees.


How she longs to hear
Their quiet applause.

Author notes

PICTURE PROMPT:

http://svdv.wordpress.com/2007/08/09/gothic-beauty-part-5/

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  • PatheticKt
    August 12, 2008

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    Hmm, I like the theme behind this short write. It's about the persona having her confidence shrink but still shows that she still has it ^^
    Bittersweet melody, silent symphonies, quiet applause, etc: wonderful touch for this piece to be quite remarkable
    I just feel like something's missing, I don't feel much of the impact in here ^^' I'm sure this piece will be the best once you written some more lines to show much more emotion
    No worries, it's impressive since it begs the reader for more and makes him/her suddenly try to be in the shoes of the persona and all- touche n.n


  • nilav
    August 8, 2008
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    i really liked it ...the words are powerful enough to bring out the emotion...


  • vampireblood
    August 8, 2008

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    WOW!
    I love it. I can definately relate to this piece. Your poem flowed very nicely. I will definately keep this in mind when I judge the contest. =] Thanks for entering and best of luck to you in my contest.
    <3 Vampy


  • raw love
    August 5, 2008

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    oh wow, I really like this. Captivating in a quiet way. beautiful in a modest way. You have my applause..... This is nice.

    In Christ,
    deep one


  • Dragonheart1 gold member
    July 18, 2008

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    Thier silent aplause..I am sure they heard it if she didnt.Music alwallyus sothes the soul especaily soft string music.


  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    July 18, 2008

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    How she longs to hear their quiet applause, what an emotion to wash over me as I read that ending ... something so bittersweet about it just locks this whole write up perfectly

    ♥
    Thank you & Best of luck
    Stay safe
    ~Manda


  • intanglio2ring
    July 15, 2008

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    Subtle and Resonating

    A Beautiful work here and an in depth intrepretation of the picture. Your careful word choice is a delight!
    Good Luck in the contest!
    Tang


  • Beauty Of Silence
    July 11, 2008

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    AWW

    this was so sad yet so beautifully written! the imagery here was stunning! wow, you're really good at this wee! >.< this poem was deep and emotional... and filled with so many beautiful words! keep penning buddy, you're awesome and best of luck in the contest!

    ~RANJI


  • DolphinLass silver member
    July 11, 2008
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    wow very well expressed..good luck

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