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The Dark Light

Standing like the lowly trees in hurricane winds
at the water's edge I stand waiting, for something
perhaps you in the endless seas, drowning me
with their dark serendipity,

cliff faces jut out of endless cracks

of evil laughter on the air.

Foaming lies of all you speak
surround me in this fatal shroud
midnight black, yet bloody and discreet
not a beam or glimmer of light in the sky
your clouded visions delude me once more,
to pull at the truth which may be there,
misery a tainted veil upon my face of plaintive hypocrisy,

as once more you lie through pained and smiling eyes.

 

Where now will you lie?

leaving me on this stranded island, darkness in my reflective panes

of insanity and ridicule,

your eyes the windows to your dying soul

I am your mirror,

would you like to know what I saw in you? 

 

Your disgrace of me defeated your objective

to live and to let live

instead this candy-coated nightmare continues

your cyanide dreams and predatory hallucinations

devour me in this violent sea of bleeding hearts and dying eyes

your cries falling on deaf ears, you reach for me but cannot reach

for I am on this stand-out prison only less the bars

and will not give you my hand for help.

 

Your lungs filling with your lies, drowning you

in some malicious revenge, not by me but by yourself

your heart a tangled mess of tatters,

your mouth a gash in your desperate face,

your maiden sighs and breathes in your air,

for your blood-filled mouth will lie no more.

 

Author notes

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  • amazingly written

    amazing choice of vocabulary. your discription in this poem was increadable. love your metophores. This poem just blew me away keep up the amazing work


  • xXxIceQueenxXx
    July 30, 2008

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    Great write. This was a beautiful poem and an awesome background. My only complaint is that the color or the text makes it sort of hard to read.

    Thanks for entering this in my contest!


  • The.Tango.Emily
    July 30, 2008
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    Great write.
    I loved the poem, the background and the picture
    Thank you for entering!


  • Ravensdark
    July 27, 2008

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    Excellent imagery and metaphor you have used here. I really enjoyed reading this poem. Tis really well written. Thank you for entering and good luck.


  • nilav
    July 14, 2008

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    this originally shows the power of words.....it took me to abyss of many feelings ,leaving there, unable to come out...


  • NyteShade
    July 12, 2008
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    Beautiful work here Doll. Full of imagery and very descriptive. Nicely written.


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    July 11, 2008
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    FANTASTIC

    you have done an incredible job with this prompt. You have blown me away with this poem. the imagery is vivid beyond anything that I could have ever imagined. extremely dark write, with incredible sadness, that I could feel through out the entire poem..

    good luck

    kat


  • Beauty Of Silence
    July 11, 2008

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    oh my god!

    this is superb... i'm blown away by the stunning imagery here! a beautiful write filled with unbearable angst and it was pretty dark! but i still loved it! keep writing!

    awesome!


  • Lost Vampyre Angel
    July 11, 2008

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    this is amazing sweetheart i loved the poem hun,
    you should be very proud of this because it is wonderful,
    it was such a pleasant read,
    all my love,
    kitty xxx

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    July 11, 2008
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    I am impressed


  • Dmonik
    July 11, 2008

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    Excellent and powerfully written Georgia!
    I thoroughly enjoyed this write.
    The word play, the style...everything worked well to produce a great piece of art

    'D'

  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    July 11, 2008

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