I'm spewing some verse
about this free-verse-curse.
There is no longer skill
to the poet's "quill."
People just write pretty words,
and then hope that it works.
...I know that didn't quite rhyme,
but I near-rhyme all the time.
This one also has no sense of timing,
but it does have rhyming.
Few poems today have either.
Almost all have neither.
At least pick one,
or your poem's no fun.
There's a bite in the words,
but a kiss in the flow.
So now pay attention,
as I put on a show.
I'll teach you lesson,
you won't soon forget.
About how words,
belong in duet.
When words come together,
with structure and emotion,
something wonderful is born,
rolling like waves on the ocean.
as I freestyle these words
I think to myself,
does this make a difference,
or will it be put on the shelf?
Will people hear my cry,
for some timing or meter?
Will rhyming return,
to make my life sweeter?
May structure rise from the ashes,
May others see my reason,
and return to rhyme and time,
and hence start a truly beautiful season.
Author notes
lol, that all felt very forced, which it was, considering I wrote it in two minutes, but it was fun! and I really do wish people would try some more structure in their writes... not that this one had any timing, and it did have some bad forced-rhymes. I believe that free-verse has it's place, but I think it's not so large as people want it to be.
ready? Rant:
Free-verse poems on this site are becoming just pretty words randomly allocated to different lines. If you want to have any effect of poetic feel, there needs to at least have some sort of meter, and maybe even pentameter. And rhyme makes everything melodic and lyrical. When you can make a vivid-imagery style mix with strong emotional base, and then can contain it in rhyme, you have a truly great poem. If I start running across them, I'll just send the author points... I can't even write that when I write something for days on end. Grow some poetic balls, and start thinking inside the box, because gifts can only be received if they are properly wrapped. What I'm saying is: I won't understand your emphasis, timing, or anything, when you write free-verse. No matter how good you are at punctuation. Free-verse is to be read aloud; but you can't do that on this site. So if you give it some structure and stuff, I can pick up your timing and emphasis simply by the amount of syllables you use and what you rhyme...
ahhch... who am I kidding? no one's going to change, no matter how logical I am.
Do you agree?
Comments
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Most of the time I write rhyme
I'm learning the free's not a crime
I find rhyming easy
It don't make me queasy
But sometimes a free verse may chime
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