I am lost in the middle of the forest of my tears
In the darkness of each corner, I can see my fears.
I am standing at the crossroads; I don't know what to do.
In the shadow of each tree, I am searching for you.
You are the soft light of the moon, waking up the waves
Lead me out of the darkness of the quiet forest caves.
You are the whisper of the wind, telling me my road.
How can I understand the invisible secret of your code?
I am lost in the middle of the forest of my tears
But as the sun rises, I no longer see my fears.
Sunlight dropping from the sky makes darkness fade away.
My troubles leave with the night, and I see a brand new day.
Author notes
Hi! I'm Maple!
I just began to learn to write poetry today. Thanks to Shya for helping me a lot! Without her kind help, i can not write the this poem well. I'll go on learning English poetry.
A contest entry
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Comments
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This was awesome. Good imagery
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really a nice write you have penned for my contest. The rhyme and flow are both great. "You are the soft light of the moon, waking up the waves
Lead me out of the darkness of the quiet forest caves.
You are the whisper of the wind, telling me my road.
How can I understand the invisible secret of your code?"
that's lovely and thank you for entering -
This is quite a good poem that you have written here. You've captured some interesting imagery in there as well! Rhyme is good and consistant, though the flow seems a little bit wobbly here and there.
Thank you for entering the contest!
Leander -
This is wonderful
Great imagery and emotion here, and a wonderful sense of atmosphere. The title was excellent! You express yourself really well. The ending was especially wonderful, and your use of repetition. I really liked the line "You are the soft light of the moon, waking up the waves". Overall, a beautiful write. You have done really well if this is your first poem! Thanks for entering the contest, and good luck with your future poetry-writing!
peace xx
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This is an awesome poem. It was written with such feeling. I enjoyed the read!!! Thank you for entering my contest
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Wow! This was excellent!
I love your metaphors... I don't think I've heard anything like them.
I can't wait to see more of your work! Keep working.
(By the way, thanks for you comment.)
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Welcome to AllPoetry
A lovely sweet poem. I read your authors page and for someone who is learning english as a second language you are doing an excellent job. I would never have know that english was not your first language from reading your poem.
Keep writing and again, welcome to the site.
Violet
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Welcome to all poetry
Hi treelhs
You have some great lines in this poem
Tomorrow is always a brand new day and a brand new start Good poem Please keep writing, reading and commenting
Barbara
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Welcome to AllPoetry!
This is very good. I like the whole meaning to your words and I think you did it well. It holds lovely rhyme and flow and has a lot of expressing. Great work!
Welcome to AP. If you have any questions or need help with anything, feel free to IM me.
Keep expressing through writing.
Storm
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