Forty-five
And what have I done?
What is my life,
Has it just begun?
And tomorrow
Just another day?
Time gone cold,
Far away
Memories
Of days gone by
A smile, a touch, a gentle sigh
Laughter, raindrops, melodies
Disappear in the distant breeze
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thank you Rowan, took Gilly's advice which is always good advice methinks
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definitely a budding poet here, and I'm glad you left aligned.
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This has a sad but gentle feel to it, a bit like a whisper on the breeze.
Your rhyme is lovely and doesn't sound forced at all. Gilly has got me used to left align these days so I agree with her there.
This is really lovely....will be back to read more of yours later.
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Thank you very much Lucy, I appreciate your comments
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I'd prefer to see this set to the left as im not a huge fan of centre-aligned poetry...
but i think the rhythm in this stands well on it's own.. time to stretch your poetic wings girl.. and fly
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Thank you Gilly, all feedback is greatly appreciated, and I have now changed it so that it is left alligned xx
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