You've spent half your life deceivin'
the other half believin'
we all believed what you had to say
I've spent half my life cryin'
the other half denyin'
There could be another way.
Half the time we're happy
Half the time we're blue
Half the time we're comin'
Don't know where we're goin' to
It's a symptom of a problem
We won't admit we have
Half the time we're good
But all the time we're bad
We can't see the good times
For lookin' at the sad
Half the time we're wastin'
All the time we have
Half the day I'm wishin'
I could sleep my life away
Half the night I'm wide awake
What more can I say.
I don't know what I want
But I haven't found it yet
It's out there somewhere
The thing I want to get.
You tell me this is it
I've got to stop and see
That everything I want
Is right in front of me,
But I just can't accept
That this is all there is
There must be something bigger,
Something better than this.
I spend half my time regrettin'
Half the time forgettin'
I don't like livin' this way
Half my time cryin'
The other half denyin'
There really is a better way.
Author notes
Wall of Denial
A contest entry
- Wall of Denial by MuddyKing.
800 points, ended July 11, 2008, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Magnificent~
Love Your Voice spoken and the rhyme which flowed~
from beginning to end-
Excellent take on the prompt~ and Powerful message
woven within
Congratulations on Your Trophy win!
-Throws confetti-
Woooooooooo Hoooooooooooo
Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
Best wishes too
and much love & light~ Desire~*~
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I could see this as a blues tune...really
may have a typo lefe+life stanza 5
I like this although I'm not huge on rhyme
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Thank you so much for your comments, compliments, suggestions, the Silver and most of all the Favorites. I consider it an honor to be on your list. I've read your poems but was always too intimidated to comment, guess I can't get away with that anymore. Thank you again!
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just say what you feel...with comments and writing
always be true to the voice in you
and you are on my list for a reason...remember that
peace and hugs
Muddy
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Thanks for the comment and the heads up. Yeah, I know it messed with my chances of getting a trophy, but some times you have to follow your muse, it just came out so fitting to the prompt, for me anyway.
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This would make a great song--Perfect flow of the unforced rhyming verse--Format is flawless
Well Done & Best of luck in the contest!!
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I absolutely love this poem/song(?). It flows amazingly, I was seriously very impressed at how seamless the entire thing is. Besides that, I love the content, I love the message of the poem. This was truly an awesome write.
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