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Pleasantries

 

 

 

 

You call me at work just to say,

“I love you,” of course with

no emotional bartering or

ulterior motives in mind.

 

I found the yellow sticky note

you strategically placed on the mirror,

a sensual message with its

edges curled by the steam

 

from my morning shower, and

I shaved with a smile.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Avendesora Dreamer
    July 24, 2008

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    I like the image of the sticky note steamed up by the shower and perhaps the message upon it in particular Its the little things that make life worth living, and you have captured some of the sweetest little things right here..


  • tara wilson gold member
    July 11, 2008

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    "a sensual message with its
    edges curled by the steam"

    excellent lines here with a dual meaning/'message'..lol

    lovely


  • Margaret Denham gold member
    July 11, 2008

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    It's always the small, caring things that make a difference and you put that thought across so well.

    Best wishes in the contest dear.

    Love Margaret


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    July 11, 2008

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    And it's those kind of things that make love stronger!  The little things done and said.. that bring a smile to the face and heart!!

     

    Aww.. how romantic and lovely!

    :f


  • pastiche
    July 11, 2008

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    You have such a gift for picking out the small, the most ordinary things in the plodding parts of our lives and raising them up into little gems of poetry... (Even down to the subtlety of the title).
    Another beauty!
    Good luck in the contest!


  • TheNymph
    July 11, 2008
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    that is really gorgeous, you have portrayed the poetic beauty of love so well.

  • ashjoe76
    July 11, 2008

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    Amazing

    Such things truly add poetry to life! A remarkable take on the prompt. Once again, you prove how much you care for the little things in life. Congrats and best regards!


  • onerios13
    July 10, 2008

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    a sensual message with its

    edges curled by the steam


    from my morning shower, and

    I shaved with a smile.


    Lovely. This one is a keeper...and something I think Jane will also enjoy.

    Thank you for entering.


  • fortyninereasons gold member
    July 10, 2008

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    I am sure you would smile, radiating with love. Well done. Juls


  • Cannonsfire
    July 10, 2008

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    Ah this is so lovely, so personal and I could imagine the smile would be a mile wide for the thoughtfulness. Love, C

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