I can see past that self-assurance
That cold, distant shell outside
To that shaky wall of denial
That is slowly chipping away
Your not all you appear to be
Vulnerable, delicate,
Are two words that you would never use
To describe yourself
But deep down, you know that I'm right
Could you let me in?
Past that breaking wall of denial
Over the barrier of lies
Into that soft core on the inside
Closed from the world
This could never happen to you
You refuse to believe
Somebody has broken your defenses
No matter what I say
Nothing will convince you
That you need more than yourself
To survive in this world
Suppose that this never happened
I replaced all the barriers I broke
The question remains unanswered
Would you still let me in?
Author notes
This happened in real life, with my friend trying to convince me that I'm not all I try to be outside. So, I turned what she said into a poem so I could try to understand it better, it's not her exact words, but what the message she was trying to get across was
A contest entry
- Wall of Denial by MuddyKing.
800 points, ended July 11, 2008, 10 entries
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Comments
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ending with a question here is so very effective
excellent -
Interesting question you pose here. Yeah there are all kinds of walls out there.
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