Life is short when you're dyslexic
We'll draw the line if you're pencil thin
You don't look to us to be that stupid
Even with your foolish grin
Marry for money is your new goal
Time is money if you're caught short
You can always be a rich bitch, baby
Even with your knickers down, you're bought
Now I know you come with luggage
I've seen that haunted look in your eyes
Even when you're screwing with my head
Through all the coke and all the lies
What you did, you did in all faith
Because I know I played my part
For all the grief and all the passion
You ignited in me like a spark
But if I was to be that candid
I know that you will never change
You've been awake now since last Wednesday
Don't you think that's kind of strange?
What is it you are thinking?
Why do you look so god-damned surprised
Is it because you're still half stoned
With all the coke and all the lies
I may have had my faults with some things
But enough's enough that can be said
All in all you had the advantage
Because you were so damned good in bed
Yeh! all in all you had the advantage
Because you were so damned good in bed
A contest entry
- Wall of Denial by MuddyKing.
800 points, ended July 11, 2008, 10 entries
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900 points, ended July 14, 2008, 21 entries
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Comments
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WOW...this is a pretty intense poem. I really like, extremely well written, your lines flow well, and I just love the imagery your create with your words. My favourite part is:
"But if I was to be that candid
I know that you will never change
You've been awake now since last Wednesday
Don't you think that's kind of strange?
What is it you are thinking?
Why do you look so god-damned surprised
Is it because you're still half stoned
With all the coke and all the lies"
^^^ SUPERB!!!
Thanks so much for sharing this, and taking the time to enter my contest,
Luck.
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Hmm. This one really makes you think. Strong message, good presentation. I like that you point out that the dishonesty and denial are as much a problem as the drug use itself. Thanks for entering my contest!
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this makes me wonder if the sex was better on drugs
but the message here is clearly denial
excellent -
Wow, tracing all the things we use to drug ourselves with
such eloquent words.
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