You point your finger to the bed,
hushing me as we walk
Not a sound I can make
You blanket my eyes
in loves scarlet cloth
and wrap my arms in velvet
Clothing cut away,
tenuous strands cross my body
as fingers begin to explore.
At war with my body,
control the breathing,
the trembling moans
Escape my lips
Work up, and down
My body,
Your playground
I cant take this anymore
begging you to enter me
This lust cannot be abandoned anymore.
The marriage of you and me
Colliding into one
A war of the sex
See who arrives first.
In heaping mounds of exaustion
Sweat beads glisten our bodies,
Grin from ear to ear
Ready for another go?
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Whitedragon Poem#2
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A contest entry
- erotic war by diabeticboy.
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I liked how the poem built in intensity as it moved towards its . . uh . . .climax. The last line is playful and effective!
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Was good
never stop expressing yourself -
Wow. Violently Hot...sultry. I love this, pure dark sexyness. Keep up this style
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Steamay
heh gotta love this...pure awesomeness and it even let an imagination wander.
the imagery was beautiful...your write was sensual and tasteful
thanks for entering
Dani♥
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lol
i love the slight humor at the end you think it'll stay sensual then that part "ready for another go?" classic!
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oh yes im always ready for another go
i do believe this one was better then the other poem
ty for entering this piece and good luck
btw thnx that kinda cheered me up iv not been feeling all to well
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