Through swirling mists I vaguely see
the missing part in the heart of me.
There he stands with big brown eyes
here to sweep away doubts and lies.
Sweetly attentive to only me
takes me to new heights I thought I'd never see.
Touching softly my hidden place
ecstasy cumming pleasure to taste.
Passions rising sweetly sung
divine pleasure from your tongue
seeking now to only please
from secret places you stop to tease.
To the edge of heaven passions softly burn
so I nudge you back..it's now my turn.
My hands move to what I seek
overcome with pleasure unable to speak.
My mouth seeks to swallow you
everything experimenting making it new
when now you enter deep inside
from pleasures climaxing rising tide.
rising higher moaning's only sound
entwined together as we're crashing down.
Author notes
A contest entry
- erotic lust or making love by Blissfullhatred.
800 points, ended August 24, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
honesty please...
Comments
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love it
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Sweet Love...
Sissy...this touches my heart. The words are so heart-felt and consuming. Passionate and warm. Blessed be Love. You deserve all the wonderful blessings of Goddess. How I adore you my Sister fair!!!
Be happy and content~
Suz
Love you Sweety!!!
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Hey it's a good poem
It seems as though you took several differet approaches with this one so I'm assuming it's free verse.
The imagery was good, it kind of sprung all at once. I don't know if that was your intention or not. If so, good job. If not, perhaps a title that gives it more of a passionate set up.
Overall a good piece. -
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BC..
thanx so much for your kind comment..it was inspired ...that is all I can say..thanx for your support..means alot to me..
blessings..
namaste..
r
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