Pick a star
from the midnight sky and
place it within my soul
for safekeeping.
This massive collection
of cosmic flotsam and jetsam
that looks so tiny
from my spot on the wooden deck is a
physical accumulation
of all the steps we took
to reach this place.
To meet in the middle
of the universe,
and greet each other
with the old familiarity of
lovers in eternity.
The moon has always held
a fantastical delight for me.
As a child, I wished
with all the fervor one could muster
for things only an innocent could endeavor.
As a writer,
she enchants me and
inspires works of crystalline dreams and lunar dementia.
But each luminary
pinned to the nocturnal blanket
Captivates me
with its magic and creates
a new life in me.
As the sun sets this evening,
and the darkness falls,
calming the humid Texas dust,
I will sit in the shadows
And imagine which
belongs to us.
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Masterfully written
Bravo dear poetess, you are truly blessed with a gifted pen. Me thinks me will learn a thing or two by lending witness to your magical writes.
"The moon has always held
a fantastical delight for me.
As a child, I wished
with all the fervor one could muster
for things only an innocent could endeavor."
Powerful because of the truth wherein lies this statement.
Warmly, chrissy
P.S. Congratulations on the birth of baby girl
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Awesome
My favorite part has to be the first four lines. It grabbed me and pulled me in. The imagery in the poem is fantastic. "But each luminary / pinned to the nocturnal blanket". Beautiful!
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this is amazing!!!!!! at first it was hard to figure out but as it leveled, i was able to understand your meaning. absolutely stunning!
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Whoa
This is a very beautiful poem. I really love how you started it off with "Pick a star/from the midnight sky and/place it within my soul/ for safekeeping." When I read that I was just thinking "Wow...". This peice is filled with beautiful emotions. it flows really well and it speaks to me. Great write!!!
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Impressive
This is a truly beautiful poem. I'm overwhelmed with feeling when I read it -
wowo
beauitful
u see this is the reason i stalk ur work!!!!!!!
brilliant
the words are intense, and emotional
every one of these lines are pure and well thought
it really flows
great job
"As a writer,
she enchants me and
inspires works of crystalline dreams and lunar dementia."
i mean how do u do it!!
lol
addie
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Beautiful, reminds me a little of Neil Gaimans "Stardust"
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I love the way your poem plows and the story it tells is even more wonderfull
thank you
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" she enchants me and
inspires works of crystalline dreams and lunar dementia.
But each luminary
pinned to the nocturnal blanket
Captivates me
with its magic and creates
a new life in me."
I am loving the imagery in this! This is total brain-candy! I think I read another delicious poem of yours earlier. Keep up the good work! -
WOW!!
this was really a great write. i love the lines 13-17, it was so romantic
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wow..
To meet in the middle
of the universe,
and greet each other
with the old familiarity of
lovers in eternity.
very well written ...best of luck to you my friend
))
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"each luminary pinned to the nocturnal blanket
Captivates me with its magic and creates a new life in me." - I like these lines
I also like how you began and ended this poem
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Good to see your star shining
x x
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Ah, yes, this is the way I've felt before with certain individuals. Very well written indeed, and I liked your format. Thanks for sharing this one with us.
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This poem makes me think of my ex. We used to stargaze together with star finders and the whole thing. It was nice. Still I can look up and find random constellations. They always make me think of him.
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Hello.
A delightful write, very sweet and romantic. It has a child like wide eyed feel to it, like coming across something for the first time that really moves you, or like certain people who never stop giving you butterflies. There were some great lines in here, especially the “greet each other……”; made me think of soul mates. A whimsical write.
My regards.
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beautiful
This is a beautiful poem, very romantic and lovely. I like the layout of it and the craft which has gone into the vivid images you have picked to convey your love.
There was only one spot where I felt there was a little weakness and that's when you use 'soul' in the first verse. It doesn't quite fit with the rest of the imagery in the poem which is solid and clear and concrete. But otherwise I enjoyed this poem very much.
Nicely done,
myron.
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So many good lines. This was yet another great write. To save space I'll use line numbers.
7-11 was wonderful, I loved tiny and spot.
13-17 blew me away, the mental image of two people meeting for the first time but fitting together perfectly is an on going theme and I love it.
Lunar dementia crystalline dreams made my jaw drop, beautiful word usage. Have you been reading dictionaries again? Nocturnal blanket used to describe the sky was killer. Belongs to us... in deed.
Once again a magnificent write angel.
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