O, from what power did that evil arise
with insufficiency of mind to rule,
as innocents die, beat down by his lies.
Him, but a tyrant, a murderer...fool.
Who once allowed him such harm and such hate
in the name of profit, of might, of gain?
O, though we watch as dominance dictates-
those others, we leave, to suffer the pain.
As hunger cries restless in dreams of naught
and blood flows freely from force, to respect;
death breathes ever on, from fights never fought
and the world accepts own hands of neglect.
So, till the judgement that spits in his face
we all stay blind as he basks in disgrace.
Author notes
Written to support the people of Zimbabwe. Mugabe is the devil himself.
A contest entry
- Poetic Forms - Sonnet by Intwine.
675 points, ended August 1, 2008, 15 entries
Gold trophy winner
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This was so deep and had lots of great, dark, phrases... the rhyme was done perfectly, it flowed, and you stayed true to sonnet form. Expressed your feelings about Mugabe so well, from the title to the last closing couplet.
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Deep and moving
A dark look into the eyes of evil. Full of passion a hair raising tale. Thank you, Boog -
Well written and spoken. So VERY true!
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Bravo, Bravo
O, how I agree with your sentiments !!!!!
I think there may be one too many syllables on your first line, should arise just be rise?
Well done and good luck in the contest. Val
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"Power" is one syllable in this instance, I tried to maintain the iambs, although I'm not sure if I achieved my goal. Thankyou for your time to read and comment
BW
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Wow, what a powerful poem. And an incredibly powerful final two lines. Flows perfectly, not an awkward moment. Vocabulary, flawless. Quite ironic for such a poem to be in sonnet form. It's rare for a poem to leave me pretty much speechless but this seems to have done the trick. Good luck :-)
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Great write
I like the form and the vocabulary was spot on. !clever title! My favorite lines are: "As hunger cries restless in dreams of naught
and blood flows freely from force, to respect;
death breathes ever on, from fights never fought
and the world accepts own hands of neglect."
Overall a good write
thanks for sharing!
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Very consice and well thought out write. I can find nothing to say but how much I enjoyed the way you said what I feel. Pen on...
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i love it !
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Good. Well-written, and it flows nicely *shudders at the hideous word*. I like the last two lines: 'So, till the judgement that spits in his face we all stay blind as he basks in disgrace.' So true. He will be sent down one day. And when he is, I hope I'm there to see it... even though I won't be.
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