She watches, unseeing;
An otherworldly being.
Her femininity lies.
Another victim dies.
From her graveyard abode
Her corruption has flowed.
Suitors' remains at her feet;
Naked, stripped of their meat.
Author notes
Poem limited to 30 words. Picture prompt: Bringer Of Death by *SAB687
I was thinking about people from my past today.
A contest entry
- Quickie *2 ~ Dark...3 more entries please by Unsigned.
450 points, ended July 12, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I am quite harsh when it comes to rhyme as it is my chosen method of writing and I thought this a little forced. It is just disjointed and had so much promise....sorry but thats honest...
Simon
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LMAO
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wow great job...... i like.... i like alot..... hehe... thanks for sharing this... good luck in cntest...! but you always do well.. in my book you do
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Thank you. This is a subject I generally chose not to write about or even discuss. I try to take all the resposiblity for what went on at that time for myself. This person just made an attempt to contact me. It brought up alot of nastiness that I just had to vent.
You kind words are much appreciated.
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wow.. nicely done friends of mine this is great.. good luck in the contest!
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Thank you very much. It is pretty dark, but it relates to a dark time in my life.
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Great take on this one too! Good luck! It's an awesome write.
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It just reminded me of someone from my past.
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"She watches, unseeing;"
I love it, this is something beyond, a different side of yours, it falls perfectly with picture.
Extremely mystical and... cruel.
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She was the perfect compliment to the absolute lowest time in my life. I deserved what I got.
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I'm sorry... you have a way with words, making macabre beautiful, and regret and pain something to behold...
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Yeeeah, something macabre!
Loved XD
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I saw something personal in this one. I wrote it in about 5 minutes just before I left for a meeting. I am glad you liked it. I hope you saw the picture prompt.
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