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Self Portrait

It was fast

And it was hurried

You were quick

And I was flurried

When at last

We stood to stare

We knew we made

The perfect pair...

 

What came next

And who came later

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Become a creator

How were we to know

We would make

A perfect

Van Gogh

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We came, we saw, we conquered....

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  • EPoD
    July 11, 2008

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    Well I don't generally like rhyming schemes but this works, I think it has something to do with the short lines. Either way its a short poem yet incredibly brilliant. Only mild problem I had was in the rhyme itself, I think the last 2 lines should be merged in order to preserve the flow. Loved it


    • Anewor gold member
      July 15, 2008
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      TY!

      This is actually about me and my husband, who met on a snowy night amoungst friends, that we did not know...fell in love, married 6 months later I found out I was pregnant, though Dr.s said that it was impossible, and in a year later we gave birth to a child, a baby boy..it was fast, and it was hurried.....etc...He was perfect, our Van Gogh...A combination of ourseves..our portrait... so to speak