I brought what you wanted.
You brought nothing.
We said that faithful,
Was the path we walked.
But did it last? No!
Broke the vow, broke our love.
It's just many fine lines,
With all of your thin lies.
They destroyed who we were.
But defined you even more.
You murdered me slowly.
And broke my heart selfishly.
Buried, with a tomb and all.
Accidentally immortal I became.
Living in a coffin with the stone.
Just don't shatter me again.
Immortal I am, immortal I will be.
Saved from the world and you.
Accidentally immortal through death.
Author notes
It may not really seem like it fits but if you think about. Death is like a sort of freedom and being left alone by a lover is one of the worst things to happen. So in a stretch it sort of fits. ^^"""""
A contest entry
- Immortality... by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
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Comments
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Death is exactly freedom. It is finally becoming one with body and soul, and mind. Accepting yourself, and giving yourself back to the earth. It's about finally finding peace. This is great. Thanks.
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great job! it was an amazing write! you did a great job on this so good luck!
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Hum..very sharp immagery yet very true as well...Thank you so much for entering my contest..my friend...
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