Doorknobs revolve in despair
as flaming cantaloupes
scream oblong operettas
to my parched bicycle seat.
The sand of discontent
writhes in agreement.
I am.
Author notes
This poem perfectly captures my love of cardigan sweaters.
(KGJ, I'm totally messing with you. lol I just thought I'd throw a curve ball into the contest for a laugh. Hope you don't mind. )
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A contest entry
- Abstract Writers Welcome!!! For my favs only.... by kiwigirljacks.
600 points, ended July 15, 2008, 13 entries
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I think Joe Biden pinched this and used it in his acceptance speach...
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Hope you didn't think my comment below was rude!! I think your poem is gorgeous!
Did you know that over here, sweaters are called 'jumpers' but a cardigan is just a cardie!! we wouldn't call them cardigan jumpers! -
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Not at all! I just had a busy weekend and was out of town yesterday. Your comment "Huh?" actually cracked me up. It was very concise and exactly the reaction I was looking for to this, er uh, poem. lol
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Huh?
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LOL.. I had no idea that was about cardigan sweaters! lol.. that surely did throw me for a curve ball and did give me a giggle.. I don't mind at all..
See now I was thinking it was about fighting going on behind closed doors... and a means of escape (bicycle) not being enough to make you leave and therefore there is almost like an agreeing to disagree state that forms within the home. lol
Nice one!
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Your interpretation is perfect. Of course, it could also mean the exact opposite. lol Good luck with your contest.
M
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Mark, I looked at this again and again. Couldn't wrap my mind around it at all, then I read your note. ...and cardigan sweaters? Too funny!
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lol
Mark your so damned funny! That is quite the doornob sweater you have. Please don't wear it to the Survival Training!
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Hey Chuck,
Yeah, I'm tired of writing poetry that makes sense and doesn't require WWII decryption devices to be understood. I'm going for totally nonsensical from now on. As the saying goes, "If you can't dazzle 'em with brilliance, baffle 'em with bullsh**." lol And if they don't "get it", it doesn't mean that I'm a bad writer, it means the readers are too dumb! It's a win-win for me! (Insert maniacal laugh here.
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Have a great weekend!
M
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The cardigan sweaters made me laugh! Is this what happens when you read the Naional Geographical? Like the abstract write! Hope Jacks likes it - good luck!
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