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Galavnise

They said the knew me,they knew it all-
Emphasise their rise, but not their fall
They tried to break me,make me, change me,
thought:"It's okay to crush her really.

"Trip her, push her, knock her over,
Watch her blow like a supernova."
Thought:"Let's see how far we can push her,
Prise open her purpose, delve into the fissure."

The broken links are long gone,unreal,
For I am Galvanised, born from steel.
You can't emasculate-too slow, too fast-
But if you do reach me,be warned-it won't last.

For this is only time, and it lapses so quickly-
I'll be gone from you, and you may be sorry:
Not once,did you consider me.All along
You thought you had won.Yet I carry on.

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I asked on a forum what I should write about, and was told to write what I feel-so I remembered what had happened that day,and wrote! I'd love some constructive criticism, so any comments are welcomed.

What do you think? Which words could be replaced? What sounds awkward?

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