create a vision of artful purpose
and purity of line and space
breathe the air of white orchids
with a dance of pure passion
Author notes
prompt: dance
A contest entry
- Ecstasy of Movement by MortalPhoenix.
700 points, ended July 30, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Short and powerful, I love those first two lines, the way they work together and build up the rest of the poem.
Well penned.
~lost
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thanks for the comments and compliments . .
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a pointedly powerful poem...concise and controled diction...nicely done! peace
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I love the fact that you wrote such a short poem, they are easier to read and, in my opinion, usually have as much if not more meaning than the longer ones. The first two lines completely captured me, but the second two, though also beautiful, feel kinda detached, like they were from another poem.
Thank you for entering my contest and good luck. -
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thanks
I wanted to create a feeling about ballet . . so the dance mention in the second two . . !!
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