Erase my sanity,
Pretend you care,
Shun me when everyone’s around,
Render me speechless.
I can’t speak anyway,
Sing your poisonous lullaby,
Make me yearn for something more,
Torment me to the edge of my sanity,
I can’t take anymore,
Can’t handle this kind of hurt,
Bewitch me with your lies,
Lets play pretend,
You do it so well,
Lets pretend you care,
Does that hurt you?
Like it hurts me?
Brush away my tears,
But that doesn’t mean they’re not shed,
Your silence is loud enough,
For both of us, why add mine?
Wasn’t I pretty enough,
Was I too much for you?
Sick of worrying about what I may never have,
I don’t need another rejection,
Demolish my fears,
I can’t do it by myself.
Author notes
i went with the wordbank option but i also went with the title option
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Definitely a perfect and incredible take on the prompts. I was amazed from the first line on, as you portrayed such an emotion I can definitely relate to. This really hit home:
-I can’t take anymore,
Can’t handle this kind of hurt,
Bewitch me with your lies,
Lets play pretend,
You do it so well,
Lets pretend you care,
Does that hurt you?
Like it hurts me?
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Yeahhh, I can relate so well, maybe TOO well, to those lines. Beautiful. Thanks for the entry & good luck ! ♥
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nice write! really impressed with your style here! good luck in the contest,
Han x
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wow.. great take on prompt and great combination with the title too. great job I enjoyed it very much!
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I like this poem alot
good luck in the contest!
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"Brush away my tears,
But that doesn’t mean they’re not shed,
Your silence is loud enough,
For both of us, why add mine?"
Awww that's so good and sad and a zillion other things too ^^
I love the take on the option, so cool
Good luck with your entry!
Claire x
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