what more could i want?
what more could i need?
if there were anything more,
i'd not have agreed
to spend the rest of my life
with the man that i love.
He treats me so well,
loves me for me,
my heart begins to swell,
and i can hardly breathe,
when i think, then see
how our future can happen,
of what is going to be.
I probably seem crazy,
to some passers-by
when i smile and giggle,
as i walk 'bout alone
and think of this boy,
that cute little wiggle.
i stretch out the corners
of my mouth far and wide
when i'm more than aware
of this feeling inside.
I smile because he makes me,
he doesn't really know how,
just when i think "I love you right now,
and I loved you before"
and then quote the faggot
"Forever more."
I smile with passion,
conviction and truth,
I smile when he laughs,
cuz my pants are too loose.
My cheeks start to ache
so now i decipher
to disregard those who
say love shouldn't hurt.
Author notes
This was written late at night, after a long shift. Please excuse the grammar and other errors, I am in the midst of editing and revising
Excluding grammar that is in the process of being edit...whacha think?
Comments
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This is so sweet you two are in so much love. It made me laugh about the part when your pants are loose, because they always are!!!!!! love you sandcat!!!
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Hmm..
first off.. i love you but this killed my eyes..its werid how everyone just thinks of a smile as a smile. But you've manage to prove that it's soo much more then just a persons expression. It's the meaning behind the smile that deepens its purpose.
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Thanks huge! I wasn't really expecting the ending either, it just kinda occurred to me while sitting in bed! Appreciate the feedback
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from the beginning its kind of ddr. sues rymeing, but a nice flow. you pulled it into a nice rythem swelling at breath. nice imagery "wiggle". beautifully said ending, unexpected in the poem, and a great point and story. good job.
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