The last daisy of the pack,
Mocks me of your beauty.
Last chance to win the game.
"He loves me; he loves me not."
The game that brought us together.
Now this game keeps us apart.
Should I keep my secret from the daisy?
Or does it already know my secret?
Does it know that I want to be with you?
That's why I can't win this game.
This game that causes broken love.
Knowing the cause of the daisy.
I'll just stop playing now.
I've already lost this game,
So tell me "What's the use?"
I hate you daisy,
You destroyed me and my love.
Now his beauty lives in the distance.
Too far for my grasp to reach.
I'm done with you daisy, done.
Author notes
picture - http://photobucket.com/image/distant%20beauty/ifatasoy/A_Distant_Figure_by_TheTragicTruth_.jpg
picture by ifatasoy from photobucket ^^
Options that I felt could fit - #3, #6, #8, and #12.
I slightly doubt option 6 I just put it in there just in case it might make you think of a memory that makes you want to cry.
Not much of a hate poem but its more of an odd kind of hate. For the contest about hate its kind of funny if you think about it.
A contest entry
- Your Words Were Bullets And I Was Target Practice by EvenStarsBreak--x.
450 points, ended August 11, 2008, 30 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - HATE HATE HATE HATE by RawrSmileBabyPlz.
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i like the use of that daisy love me/love me not thing
good -
"Should I keep my secret from the daisy?
Or does it already know my secret?
Does it know that I want to be with you?
That's why I can't win this game.
This game that causes broken love." that was my favorite part good poem thanks for entering my contest i wish you the best of luck
..<3..
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Thank you for the comment. ^^ I'm glad you liked my poem was a weird write at first but the picture made it work out nicely. And I'm glad you liked that part I felt like a lot of people would be able to understand it. And you're welcome for entering the contest. It was a great idea for one. ^^
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It was quite interesting, very original =] It was very well written and the feelings were portrayed quite nicely. Thanks for the entry.
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I really like it. I read it anyway. Hee hee
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Hehe Well thank you for reading it. ^^ And I'm very pleased you liked it.
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wow!
this was a creative piece! it was interesting... i love the emotions you've portrayed in your words here! they were strong and powerful! it was deepply filled with sorrow too! keep penning!
AWESOME!
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This is an interesting write, but does not follow my rules....
You were suppose to write a poem based of the two pictures....
I'm sorry but I have to DQ you, if you wish to enter again, go ahead, but please follow my rules
Thank you...
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