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A song of sea

Silently I sing a Swedish sea shanty.
Of shores, sailors and sunken ships.

Softly the song secerns of sites
situated at shrouded sandbanks.

Spots sworn as secret by survivors
of seaborne scourges.

Slowly the seascape song stops
and semblances a seal of silence

Author notes

A poem done in alliterative verse. Letter of chocie? - S.

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  • catz Moderators member
    June 19
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    This is quite a tongue twister and still a lovely visual poem.
    Your letter "s" and word choices are very good
    I've read this before but couldn't resist reading it again.

    Good job

    Dee


    • catz Moderators member
      June 19
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      And of course the system wont let me applaid the poem again but here's some anyway


  • white stone silver member
    March 27

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    surely a synopsis of sea shanties shines silvery savory!
    Salutations! Since we're on a ship let's snorkle!!


  • bigperm gold member
    March 3
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    sssssweet...

    sure ussse alot of sss'sss. very nice choice of letter favoritism. Smokin imagery if you will.

  • catz Moderators member
    January 3

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    This is very good I never thought of writing a poem like this but maybe I'll give it a try... Alliterative verse, huh.
    I can see that you put some thought into this piece. Great use of words and nothing seems forced, nice flow

    Dee


  • laurel
    August 14, 2008

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    impressive.

    i'm sure this was hard to write! nothing about this poem felt forced, which is a testament to your wordcrafting. thank you.


    • g-tonttu
      August 16, 2008
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      Thank you.
      Yes this was not easy,
      the three first verses were quite easy but the closing was tricky.

      I'm glad you enjoyed this poem, as it is one of my favourites.
      - G


  • Metaphorist
    August 14, 2008

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    I am a huge fan of alliteration so I just had to check this out. Wow! It is amazing and seems like you put alot of work into such a short piece. Well done!

    • g-tonttu
      August 16, 2008
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      Thank you so much for the applause.
      I'm thrilled that you found this piece amazing, s I also really like it.
      The amount of work wasn't that bad, as I really had fun doing this.


  • PatheticKt
    August 14, 2008

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    Amazing! For a short write, I enjoyed the alliteration Spot on and nothing from the stanzas sound forced, you know what I mean?
    Anyway, I'm glad to read this, all in all

    • g-tonttu
      August 16, 2008
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      Thank you, really glad you liked it.
      I'm quite satisfied with the stanzas and pace of this poem.
      The flow doesn't brake at any time.
      ... Yeah, I know what you mean .


  • J aime Coudre silver member
    July 30, 2008

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    That is pretty good to be able to get a decent rhyme out of only one starting letter to...the rhyme is pretty good also...let me know when you learn what it is called...


    • g-tonttu
      August 14, 2008
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      Ti's Called; alliterative verse, me thinks.

    • g-tonttu
      August 12, 2008
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      Thanks for your positive feedback...I haven't found out what it's called, yet...Well maybe one day.

      Anyhoot, I will try to make another one in a near future...It's however quite a long process as I'm not a native English speaker...and I have difficulties in deciding which letter to chose.

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