Sitting in wide open spaces
surrounded by melodies
weaving through the air
around musical bodies
floating aimlessly,
there are once hidden notes
laid out for the world to see,
a perfect harmony .
A spill of lyrical beauty,
crystallizing in front of me,
a serenade under my eyes.
They were a gift of ballads ,
inspiration and emotion unfolded,
reflections of the vibrations
of a pounding heart.
Quiet but persistent,
it plays my heart strings
with silent, delicate fingers,
a building crescendo
releasing to the sky,
finally set free.
Author notes
Inspiration: Love stuff. hehe
Picture: Carpal tunnel of love by ineedchemicalx
http://ineedchemicalx.deviantart.com/art/Carpal-Tunnel-Of-Love-84176775
Contest. Ten musical words in bold:
Melodies, musical, notes, harmony
Lyrical, serenade, ballads, vibrations
Strings, crescendo
This is a love poem. Once hidden feelings are now out in the open, set free to run wild in the world and influence who they please. Could be a built up love song too.
Comments are greatly appreciated. Thank you!
Sincerely,
m o d e r n x t i m e s
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A contest entry
- Round One. INVITE ONLY! by Simply Simple.
600 points, ended September 7, 2008, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I was never...(round 1) prewrites by HollyLouise.
400 points, ended July 20, 66 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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sounds good
i like it. the content is nice and inspiring. good work.
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I love this, especially how you included the word list.
"Sitting in wide open spaces
surrounded by melodies" and:
"it plays my heart strings
with silent, delicate fingers,
a building crescendo" Those are my favourite sections.
You're going through to the next round
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This is sweet and beautiful lass....
it took me away from here to another place....
-Sitting in wide open spaces
surrounded by melodies-
The beginning of the piece is wild...
it gave the feeling of freedom right from the start..
Hearts have wings too lass....
sometimes they soar up,
sometimes they fly away,
but the music never ends.
Definitely inspiring poem.
Bless your heart
little gypsy,
Liam
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A fine poem, your choice key words fit very natural into each line.
Also like your imagery and beautiful message.
I liked your poem a lot, thank you. -
STUNNING!
This poem is so beautiful, and the imagery was so intense. i love the flow and the way this piece made me feel. an incredible write. keep penning and congratz on the gold, you deserved it 
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This is amazing. The picture helped you out a lot too. It just matched so well. The word choice and flow were superb. Just wow.... There isn't a whole to to say.
Thank you for sharing and best of luck. -
Holy smokes -- Over the top and too the moon good! I love this! I love the bolding of the words, though you may had intended to only bold them for the host to see the word list -- I think it makes it more poinant. [hope I spelt that correctly...LOL]
Touching, and more so that I enjoy music so passionately! Good luck in the round competition--I'm sure you'll go far. 
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Your words and thoughts flowed well together. Word choice and usage is exceptional. What else can I say?
...Simply beautiful. ^.^
Congrats on this great write! Good luck in the contest!
--Flare
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