Trapped inside this barbwire cell
held in by chains and shackles
Trapped inside by all the lies
this fragile heart is shattered
Always under lock and key
with eyes watching your every move
you have lost your soul
you have nothing else to lose
The love you thought you had
quickly turned into hate
I guess its time to start over
after all, its "never too late"
you fall upon your knees
as blood begins to spill
you take the razor blade
the slit, you couldn't feel
You slam against the wall
trying to break the lock
you begin to give up
untill you hear a quiet knock
you whisper "who is there"
a girl's voice, so quiet and pure
"I'm your angel, come to save you"
were you just hearing things? your not quite sure
she whsipered your name then said
"your always under lock and key"
you then see a bright light
and you slowly cease to see
Trapped inside this barbwire cell
held in by chains and shackles
then you slowly wake up
and realized it was just a dream
Author notes
I used the title option.
ok, some of it didn't rhyme, but some did. I hope thats ok??
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Comments
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I liked this. It's okay that all of it didn't rhyme, haha, it's been for it not to always rhyme than for it to be forced. Though, yes, I agree with XXVampireeyesXX that it was forced a little, but that doesn't make it, in any way, a bad poem at all. Fave lines had to be:
-Always under lock and key
with eyes watching your every move
you have lost your soul
you have nothing else to lose
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Amazing. Thanks for entering & good luck ! ♥
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the rhyme was a little forced but the image you have drawn here was great the savior and all of that was wonderfully drwan.. great you on title indeed you did excelent!
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hey, thanks. yes, i agree i did force it a bit. but i hope it turned ut ok..=]
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