Eloquent as always, the silence strikes a chord
of controversial torment and I'm left-
Where is this going again? Was I set to end a line,
or am I simply running out of time?
((Trying to find a place where I belong again))
Render me vindictive, set my blood in stone-
erase who I used to be, I don't to want be me any more.
Bewitch my mind with silhouette instructions,
devour my hopelessness, shun my dreams.
Turn me into another Demolition Dancer yearning for disaster,
use the vantage point to assume and destroy
what's left of my humble beliefs.
'Cause I'm not quite sure if I'm re(con)fined or not.
This was just another illogical fallacy,
so let's get back to to the lullaby of nothingness-
An essence of an enigma, or was that the other way around?
I'm not quite sure anymore.
((Falling apart- Falling to pieces.. What's the difference))
Author notes
Title.
Word Bank.
The Picture.. The one with the type writer and the quote on the paper about can you trust a typewriters ink.
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Comments
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nicely done though you repeated blood twice
but its ok you can use it over again doenst matter.. great job on the so many prompts you chose you did very well...
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Haha.. That's what happens when one is writing at midnight sweetie.
Switched the second blood with disaster.. Sounds better to my ears actually.
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Oh, wow, I definitely loved this piece ! & I also found it very impressive how you combined three options. Incredible. And instead of combining options & having your poem make no sense, you wrote something beautiful, something captivating. One thing that caught my eye was:
erase who I used to be, I don't to be me any more.
I'm guessing in between don't & to it's supposed to be want? haha, just a guess
I love this though. You wrote it so wonderfully. This is definite talent. Keep writing! Thanks for entering our contest & best of luck to you ! ♥
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Eep. Fixed that.
I'm glad it makes sense to some body.. Like I said to Vampireeyes.. It's now midnight- so I was afraid I wouldn't be making much sense at all.
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