I'm lost in the downpour of my own vicious tears,
Running down my face like sharp blades of cold silver.
The water mixes with the bright red paint of all my fears,
I'm trying to wipe everything away with this hand cursed with a quiver.
Shaking all over, I search for your soothing eyes amongst the darkness.
Who am I kidding? Those eyes have been gone for a long time...
Running my trembling thumb slowly across the silver's slickness,
Who am I kidding? All I need is you and I'll be just fine...
You're here now, I don't need these scars,
I don't need these toys that I know you hate.
You're here now, To free me from my binding bars,
You've come back, To once again test our fate.
You relieve me of one pain, to bring me the one that hurts the most.
The love I feel for you cuts me deeper than I can see,
But we're closer than ever, I'm your best friend; I hate to boast,
But with every single solitary word, I can't help but wonder if we'll be.
You say you're so scared because you don't trust yourself.
You don't trust yourself to wake up tomorrow and love me like you did yesterday..
After all the scars and tears, I too, wouldn't trust myself.
But something seems so different, like we love in a whole other way.
So please just tell me why,
Why it's so hard for you to be wrong for once in your life.
Will it really kill you to not be right this time?
Can't you see it's really killing me....?
Author notes
Option: Quotes.
I used the quote
Just tell me why
it's so hard for you to be wrong for once in your life.
Will it really kill you to not be right this time?
First time I've ever done something like this. It's extremely difficult. It's definately not an award winning poem by any means, but I'm pretty sure the person I want to read it, Gets it. And I'm fine by this.
Thanks for the inspiration Amanda. I've been kinda on a Poet's Block lately. :]
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Comments
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great read!
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Thank you :]
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Good grief this is amazing!!! Truly.
My fav. line,
"The love I feel for you cuts me deeper than I can see,"
this line is so deep and the way you phrase something that should be such a wonderful feeling into something painful and difficult to bare is simply astonishing!!
Absolutely wonderful!
Fantastic write! Bravo!!!
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Thanks again dear! This poem was very difficult to write, but I think I did okay. Thank you for your wonderful comments, you're really amazing :] Thanks again
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Ahhh ! I love this, bro;] It's so incredible and full of so much love/pain. The vivid emotion was absolutely astonishing and very clear to the reader. I loved how you pasted the quote and used it in your poem. You put me in awe with all of your poems
"You're here now, I don't need these scars,
I don't need these toys that I know you hate.
You're here now, To free me from my binding bars,
You've come back, To once again test our fate."
I think those are some of the most powerful lines in the poem. They are so incredibly stunning. Thank you for entering our contest & I wish the best of luck to you ! ♥
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Haha! Thanks sis! You gave me a good contest to work with. :] I can hardly find any contest that I think are worth writing for. But I liked this quote. It's very difficult to write a poem around a quote. But I think I did a pretty good job for my first time at it. It was definately fun. :]
Thanks for the kind words. They always mean the most from you :]
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wow you did a powerful job here.. It seems like its not your typical write but you did great at it... the metaphors and everything were great and you did an excellent job on the quote.. nice!
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yeah, normally i just write.
but i had an idea and i was trying to stick to it.
thanks for the comment.
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