Cascading dreams of the falling rain
Flashback of the moments I'm numb in my isolation
Merely it was just a feeling
But why am I picking up the pieces of my shattering heart?
Refused to lament over a forgotten past
Our departure held no regrets
Our convulsions have only cause us despair
Following through a pathway of my insecurity
I lock myself up behind the gateway
Waiting for my demise to ashen away the memories
In this frozen interior my soul is asleep
I'm drenched on the sideline of a yesterday
Waiting to be struck into my insanity
I render a life for my oblivion
Caught up in a reverie of illusions
Silence was my only solace
Embracing the bitter sweet reality
Chained to this cement wall
Bound to the lies like a casting spell
Keeping myself under lock and key
Barricade my life and cheated away by time
Dark messenger's lullaby
Guiding myself into the midst of chaos
How could I forfeit and withdraw from a battle that can't be won?
Love is a sin's game
Devour my heart after the taste of victory
Detaching myself from this empty whole
...Venom on my lips..taste the poison...
Author notes
Picture Option: http://i113.photobucket.com/albums/n215/amy123_08/Gothic%20Beauties/dark_butterfly.gif
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Comments
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I like this one too...use it for B&N
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I didn't understand a word of it, which is more than likely because I'm just waking up but it sounded really great. The words fit together nicely. Not too many grammar errors. Great write, keep it up. [=
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lol..thank you glad you enjoy this poem..even though it still haven't sink in yet
..just woke up?..I tend to not think when I just got up and sometimes real cranky
Lieu
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I love it
It really shows your double-sidedness, I think. How part of you is longing for your love to be beautiful, & the other part is giving in to the ugliness & despair that love brings. -
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WOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Absolutely stunning & beautiful =) Those are only few of the words that describe this poem. It is so dark and full of so much vivid imagery & emotion. Loved it. I can't even think of anything else to say. You left me in awe =)
-Caught up in a reverie of illusions
Silence was my only solace
Embracing the bitter sweet reality
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*sigh* Yeeeup. Pretty much some of the most amazing lines. You used that picture so brilliantly. I really enjoyed reading this, I could basically picture every word, every line in my mind as I read through it. Thanks for the entry & good luck to you ! ♥
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*bows* thank you thank you...glad you like it deary..though wished i could say the same right now...having writer's block for a few days already..that's why I can't comes up with anything new...*pulling out a GIANT pen and paper size of a desk out of no where and set it on the floor and doodle with it* la la la da la da la da la di do la di do
*running behind and knock you unconscious*
*running around like a mentally retard singing row row row your boat*
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you truly are insane ! teehee
but that's ohkay, right ? hahhh yeah, i've been writing off of prompts lately. woot. i can't come up with anything new to write about. my situation is still the same. sadly. lakdkljas woo ! -
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*blink**blink* is okay that I'm insane? <---:? COOOOLLL!! RIGHTO YO!!!! and yeah it's sucks..but it's ooookkkkaaayyyyy!!!! we both got some screws loose up there..*whisper* we don't use our head often that's why it's probably cover with dust right about now so all we do is hire some lil workers to clean it up
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Took long enough for you to write the poem ^.~ Have fun though?
You should give yourself a pat on the back and do the chicken dance 
Anywho, onto the comments!
For this poem, dark in its nature, was written very well ^^ And it seems that you put a lot of effort in this poem So bravo to you Because I am impressed with the writing Although just a few improvements here and there~
On line 16, "Silence" would better substitute "Silent"
Line 18, add an "ed" at the end of "Chain"
Line 23, "mid" should be "midst"
But overall, I enjoyed it ^^
Good luck with the contest and keep writing!
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lol..didn't even know the errors ..I suck at grammars and what do you mean by it took me long enough? *playing mission impossible and trap you inside a anti-power metal cage..hahaha revenge is SWEET!!!
that's for saying I'm slow which is not
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wow! epic and dark... great job.. I see you used some words and even a title here. very creative indeed.. I love the effort you placed in this because you made it powerful and gracious and yet beautiful and dark which is something I love...
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thank you for your kind words..I was banging my head trying to figure out which one am I writing aboutXP so decided to use a little bit here and there..once again thanks
Lieu
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