Daggered breaths
Flow through a scarred body
Wounds seeping waste
As a fractured mind try’s to understand
What you see in me...
You can’t {see} me
You
Can’t
See
My wounded soul
That can’t look into the face of love
Only to see the anger of hate
Show to those who are imperfect
Not show to those who are stereotypes
In this grieving world
Smear the blood of my heart
o.v.e.r.
your eyes
Maybe then you can see
The girl that is hated
Never wanted
‘LOST’
You can’t love me
It’s not allowed
In a world where only faces matter
And heart so not exist
Burned out of body’s
Those are skeletons for men
There are no real women left
Leave me alone
Love me not...
Author notes
Titles
Love Me Not
-No erotica
-Put the option number in your author's notes. We won't read your poem until you have done this.
-Dirty pretty is awesome. We like it. It's very interesting and fun to read.
-& No religion.
A contest entry
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600 points, ended August 10, 2008, 16 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
this comes from my thawing heart.. can you hear it beat?
Comments
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wow is a simple way to describe this poem. I can actualy relate to this on some levels with one of my previose friends. excelent write and i very much look forward to reading more
Blessings, Matt
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this is a powerful write and I absolutly adore the way you have written this with such emotion and thought. there is a deep voice that speaks within the lines here. well done sweetie
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This is good so full of emotion. Best of luck in the contest. Much love always.
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Wow sissy...
this was really good
I love you and good luck
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Ahhh! I absolutely loved this! What an interesting write;; I definitely loved how you used a bit of dirty-pretty in this. It really emphasizes the meaning and vibe coming from this poem. It was also very powerful, full of definite AND indefinite emotions, a bit of confusion, at that. Excellent piece.
"Smear the blood of my heart
o.v.e.r.
your eyes
Maybe then you can see
The girl that is hated
Never wanted
‘LOST’"
Yeeup. Basically my favorite lines. Especially the "Smear the blood of my heart o.v.e.r. your eyes" Amazing & vivid imagery. Thank you so much for entering our contest! I wish you the best of luck ! ♥
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this is a great point you bring not only because I can tel its personal but because its the mere truth beauty is all men cre for today and so do women and those who are worthy of admiration are shunned by "men"who are immature enough to only care for what vanishes so quiclky...
great job~
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