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Virgin Bliss

 

Bring forth my love, another hopeful night,

unite the happiness this love will spring.

Recite the words of hope, and let them sing.

Wings now given, as they gently take flight.

 

Cling softly the emotions to delight.

Invite desires, may empty souls ring.

Ignite the fires within from loves sting,

strings of memories make this moment right.

 

Let heart songs play in wonderful refrain,

arise tender passion with just one kiss.

Obtain freedom within lovers secrets,

regret not the joys the future contains.

Sighs of fulfillment, sounds of virgin bliss

remain on these lips, that they not forget.

 

 

 

Author notes

For him as always....

An Italian sonnet would have an end rhyme of: abba abba cdecde, which would mean the start rhyme for an Italian Princess Sonnet would be baab baab edcedc (or baab baab efcefc). This will give the sonnet a cascading quality when read aloud.

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  • DawnKestrel
    November 4, 2008

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    Really nice.
    Good luck in my contest!


  • Flowergirl
    August 30, 2008
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    aww very cute the pic fits the poem so well i loved it ...


  • Patpowers silver member
    July 15, 2008
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    Great write freespirit51! Liked it a lot! THANKS!!


  • PerVirtuous
    July 13, 2008
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    Amazing! This is fabulous. Straight to the finalist list.

  • PureCountry
    July 11, 2008

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    Innumerable Pleasures,

    are found in this waterfall of thought. Your words flow as gentle as a light breeze cross the conciousness, of the reader. The form lends itself to your words.

    Wonderfully Done My Friend.

    Niaish for sharing,
    Silent Hawk


    • freespirit51
      July 13, 2008
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      Silent hawk

      Thanks my friend so glad you enjoyed it. I enjoyed writing this new form. Thanks for reading


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    July 10, 2008

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    BREATH TAKING

    My sweet sister your tender words of love just take my breath away...you are so very  talented!...sighs of fulfillment, sounds of virgin bliss remain on these lips,that they not forget truly awesome! winner wrote all over it

    • freespirit51
      July 10, 2008
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      Tender wolf

      Thanks my sister for your touching words. Your opinion always means alto to me. You know have a great inspiration for my writing.


  • Soulful Woman silver member
    July 9, 2008

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    You did a fantastic job with this. I love this style of writing, and have never attempted it. You did such a great job with it.. Good luck in the contest.
    Soulful Woman

    • freespirit51
      July 10, 2008
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      Soulful Woman

      Thanks my friend for your kind words. I am glad you enjoyed my write. Being this was the first time I tried this form I am glad it touched you.


  • Eruvande Almare
    July 9, 2008

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    I love the innocence in this poem... so much has been corrupted in this day and age and no one seems to respect the softer romantic aspects of being in love. So much has become crude and harsh. Thanks for reminding us that there is more out there, I loved reading this. =) It is an excellent piece with lovely imagery as well. Keep up the good work and never stop writing!

    ~Elizabeth~


    • freespirit51
      July 10, 2008
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      Eruvande Almare

      Thanks my friend I am glad my piece touched your heart. Thanks for taking time to read my write.

  • hardeepb
    July 9, 2008

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    GREAT WRITE! So simple and sweet...the language makes the rhyming scheme work even BETTER! You're going to crush that contest!

    "Obtain freedom within lovers secrets,
    regret not the joys the future contains.
    Sighs of fulfillment, sounds of virgin bliss"

    Nothing like the virgin innocence and losing it first and only time...I wish I could lose it all over again. You've really touched me with this piece and the picture is BEAUTIFUL!

    True love and romance takes time, dedication and caring; which you depict through your beautiful rhyme. This is the best Italian Princess I have ever written...how ironic that my love is an Italian Princess as well...

    Good luck in the contest and once again you have perfected this type of sonnet. I can earn something from you! 9.5/10!

    • freespirit51
      July 9, 2008
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      hardeepb

      Thanks so much for your beautiful words. I am glad you really enjoyed it. This was my first attempt at this style of poetry and I am glad you enjoyed. I must give credit to my inspiration to whom I think of when I write.


  • Mistress Masquerade
    July 9, 2008

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    This is such a precious, tender work that made me sigh in surprise. A tear came to these eyes and now a content smile plays. This was an amazing read. Good luck in the contest.

    • freespirit51
      July 9, 2008
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      MissBehave

      Glad you enjoyed this piece my friend. I could not resist the challenge of the new form and just had to give it a shot. Thanks for reading and commenting.

  • CrystalRae2
    July 9, 2008

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    Hey.. I'm Crystal Rae and new here and all but, I just want ot say that this poem is AMAZING!!! I love poems about the emotions of love

    • freespirit51
      July 9, 2008
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      CrystalRae2

      thanks so much for the kind words. I am so glad you enjoyed it. Hope to see more of you and feel free to stop by and read my work anytime.


  • arafura gold member
    July 9, 2008
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    A sweet poem my friend. Your kind and tender heart shows in this. Good luck in the contest!


    • freespirit51
      July 9, 2008
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      arafura

      Thanks my friend for your generous words. It was a challenge I could not resist. Glad you enjoyed.

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