I see the blue sky
peak through,
and drag my heavy feet,
forward.
Walking with uneasy steps.
In search of something better,
something unknown,
where rainbows end.
In a list
A contest entry
- Where Rainbows End - around 30 words by Cindy.
300 points, ended July 9, 2008, 9 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Any good?
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This so cute! I know that sounds weird but from me that's a huge compliment! This is well thought and and beautiful! Good job!
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omgosh!
sweet.simple.and totally blew me away! this is such a mindblowing piece!
i love the depth in your words! a beautiful write, your words painted such gorgeous pictures in mind!
AWESOME!
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i love it i too am looking for something
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Some very good imagery to describe the trials and toils of life "drag my heavy feet forward" and persevering in spite of bad times.
Well done and congrats on the Bronze. -
Oohh! I like this! You've made this short and sweet, but I like the way your last line pulls in your prompt and gives hope. Well done!
faith
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yes, we all seek that elusive gold, which life hides away, causing us to press on. A well earned bronze
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Now I like the way this one went on the title prompt. Not knowing where you'll end up sometimes is the best part of getting there. tahnk you for the entry
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Great visual take on the prompt, you've worded this nicely I love the last lines :
"In search of something better,
somthing unknown,
where rainbows end."
Great! Best of luck in the contest
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