A naked moon
lies festering
in her heart,
Blood lust
calls to her
night darkened soul,
Among the graveyard green stones
where the slithering worms lie,
she breathes and feeds again,
In the moss shadows
her wings become one
with the sky,
And her teeth
become white dragons,
flaming blood from new flesh,
Her eyes
half close
as spikes of amber
snake through them,
The slivers
of her humanity
finally drop away,
like dead leaves to the ground,
as she waits patiently
beside her dark master,
while he sates himself
on death,
fresh as dark wine,
Then
and only then
do her pincer red lips
suckle on his leavings,
And that sound
makes the night shiver
and grieve for the
dawn
Author notes
This is for the Night Terrors Contest. I hope it is okay. Rose xx
A contest entry
- Dead Poet's Society (the awakening) by Dark Otter.
1000 points, ended July 23, 2008, 14 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Night Wants You by Night Terrors.
400 points, ended July 4, 50 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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spectaucular imagery packed into this and it really had an eliquant feel to it that I really found appealing. I am going to add this to the finalist list. A brillant poem through and through thank you for entering
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I think that this is more then ok you did a great job here with this piece thanks for sharing and goodluck in the comtest best wishes always
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"Makes the night shiver and grieve for the dawn" that is superb! An electrifying bit of imagery, that leaves the reader's mouth hanging open. Only one suggestion and it certainly isn't from any lack on the part of the poem. I do believe the rules call for 1st person poetry ~ me instead of she
The best read I've had today!
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Wow!
Yep! This is what I want. You became one with the monster. Its tough to do first person narration. But, your voice is decent in third person. What I do like is your poetry, very visual images. 'Blood lust calls to her darkened soul' is quite descriptive. Other phases also stuck with me. A good piece that was worth two reads.
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