Oh mother where art though?
I've been calling out to you.
Crying all of my life,
for you to come see me through.
Through all of the bad times,
and all of the good.
You never came.
And you promised you would.
But instead, you turned your head.
And you pretended like I was dead.
All my life I needed you.
And you never came to me.
It hurt so bad mom.
I wish you could have seen.
All of my pain,
and all of my hurt,
from you not being there.
I just don't think mom,
you have been very fair.
You have a man in your life.
You can show him lots of love.
But what about me mom?
Shouldn't I be above?
Above him and all the rest,
of the men in your life.
Each time you turn your back on me,
It felt like a knife.
It's going straight into my heart.
I'm tired of all this pain.
I'm tired of chasing you mom.
It's really driving me insane.
It's time for me to move on.
Yes that time has come.
Because now without you mom,
my life has just begun.
I have my own family now.
And that's all I care about.
I'm not going to be like you.
And push my kids out.
Out of my life,
just for some man.
I'll never be like you mom,
because I'll never understand.
How could you do that?
Your kids should come first.
I guess I'll never know,
because I'm done putting you first.
I'm not chasing you no more.
I am shutting that door.
I am blocking you out,
so my heart will no longer be sore.
Author notes
I had written this quite some time ago. I love my mother with all of my heart. Though as a child it was rough to feel that love back. We have since became friends, But not really a mother and daughter relationship.
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at first i thought you might have been abused by the guy, glad that that's not what happened. good job and good luck
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First of, I will applaud you for pouring so much feeling and hurt into your piece. Not many people can do that, without it being fake. Secondly, if I were you, I'd edit this piece to make it better by using punctuation and by perhaps deviding this on going text into stanzas. Both things will make your poem easier to read, because at places I felt a bit lost in all of your words. It's a simple thing to do, but it will improve your piece a lot.
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I think there is a lot of deep pain in your words. That you have felt/feel this way is truly sad. But you have certainly set your feelings to paper with much depth. Well done and good luck in the contest.
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thank you for reading my poem and letting me enter your contest. to me it's not about winning I just joined this site and I enjoy writing. It's a good way for me to get it all out
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It really isn't fair that you were not put first by your mother. That is a deep pain, and you have written so vividly about your feelings in this write. I am sorry this was your experience. You deserved so much more and so much better. Thanks for entering my contest. Blessings, Patty
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