Obsession is a phone number
one eight hundred pain
And still I have to dial it
though it’s making me insane.
In the past, a life of heartache
was all that I had known.
Through the endless lonely nights
spent waiting by the phone.
Letting go of familiar pain
is a painful thing to do.
I have to say farewell
to the life, that I once knew.
I have to answer the phone
when God is on the line
and listen to his direction
leaving my old life behind.
The gift of life God gives us
we unwrap every day
and the gift we give him back
is shown in how we play!
To live, I had to die
to be reborn anew.
Ending all my self deceit
to thine own self, I’ll be true.
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Blues Man
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A contest entry
- Washed in the....... by Lil-Bit Crazy.
600 points, ended July 11, 2008, 8 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Contest On Drug/Alcohol Addiction (Huge Points) by Viyanna Rosemarie.
20000 points, ended March 12, 38 entries
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Great write! Good luck!
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I like the metaphor here as the number you have to dial but you wish you didn't but you can't stop yourself. Sad I can relate.
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I don't think i've ever fully given myself to God. I don't really know what's stopping me, but I know that I should. I have fully recovered from cutting with conventional methods of medicinal therapy but i'm pretty sure I would have found it much quicker had I found God.
It's tough to be a former addict, I don't really know from personal experience, but my biological mother was a crack addicted woman...but one step at a time... -
I think it's lovely and pretty well written, but I don't like the 'thine' in the last line. Good job that doesn't matter =]
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You're writing is quite lyrical
. Do you put music/sing with these?
I like the positive outlook you brought with this, the faith in the higher power. Good rhyme and rhythm to!
Best wishes -Emmjay
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absolutely brilliant. this is exactly the type of stuff i am looking for. the addict's perspective and recovery intwined and ends beautifully. thank you so much and welcome to the finalists. viyanna rosemarie
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Wow Bill....
Love this one! I think it is my favorite to date!
Keep on penning!
Write on!
for 
on Earth
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this is clever about God being on the phone. it's nice that theres always a time when we can have a conversation with God and he knows about each of us.
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This is a very good take on the prompt. I like the way that you offered an example of hope and encouragement.
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I too liked what you wrote. It drew me in wondering where you would take this since I questioned at first on the start but oh how you brought it all together. Great write. Good luck.
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This is one awesome piece of work! I wouldn't change a thing. Loved it from title to finish...and oh how true it is..it truely touched me..thank you for sharing it.
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wow i love the flow of rhyme here..... and the meaning behind it all... thank you for sharing and entering this contest..... and good luck in this contest...!
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