You.
Yes you.
Go ahead.
Ask me anything.
Ask me why.
Go ahead.
Do it.
Ask me why the Earth is as it is.
Ask me why people are how they are.
Ask me why time exists.
Ask me why people suffer.
Ask me why the rich take from the poor.
Fucking do it.
I dare you.
All these questions.
Everyone has.
No one knows.
The answer to.
But they exist.
And they aren't nice.
Not nice at all.
And yet they exist.
Does that make sense to you?
I mean, fucking eh.
It makes no sense to me.
This planet we live on.
Why?
Why what?
It goes 'round and 'round.
Figuratively and literally.
Death.
Despair.
Hardship.
For what?
It's not our fault though.
Right?
No, of course not.
Because we're reactors.
We react.
We let others do shit to our Earth.
Then react accordingly.
Are we proud of it all?
Should we be proud of it all?
Go ahead.
Ask me.
Do it.
Author notes
I realize this isn't very poetic.. but it sort of is, eh? And who's to define poetic from not poetic.
Comments welcome.
A contest entry
- Why Not? by Hebz.
395 points, ended August 24, 2008, 54 entries
Silver trophy winner
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Comments
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i pretty much loved it!!!
awesome poem, true words, just amazing.!
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ooooooohhhh.... i like it!!! so daring, so powerful!!! excellent!! good luck...extra good luck!
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The poem looks good but I honestly didn't like the use of those taboo words. So should we really be proud of it all? I want your answer.
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This's really awesome and thought provoking. And yeah, the same questions I asked myself when I wake up and before I sleep.
Very good piece indeed.
Thnx for entering & Best of Luck
GloriousGift
Heba -
Poetry is expression in words and like emotions has many forms, the definition of poetry is in the eye of the reader. It provokes thought and issues that are very real in the world today. Its well set out to make you tumble down the words as you fall into the emotion of the writer.
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This is brilliant...absolutely brilliant.
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I disagree strongly with your AN. This is poetic. Poetry can be anything, even a rant. I like how you started and ended the poem with a "dare" persay. Very well done once again.
Warmest,
Mylee -
I really like this poem Holy Man it was kinda the same as mine but me being a beginnier yours is way better.
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It's really good. And fits in with a definition of poetry I read ages ago and have stuck by ever since: 'poetry is the best words in the best order'. Don't let people say things aren't poetic because they don't follow rules, that's rubbish. Creativity shouldn't be subjected to the constraints of rules. Of course, that's only my rather strange opinion.
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nice
a very nice poem.. i like it. i shall let my friends know about it.
-Molly
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funny ...these were my thoughts today...I enjoyed this very much...blessings always~ Trisha
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daring
yea I like it
the boldness , the abstract style
the issues , the encouragement, the discussion of it all
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Like Angel Flower said, poetry is what you make of it and I thought this was very poetic. I like how short and to the point every line is. Thanks for your comment on my poem
Blessings,
~Michaela~
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Poetry is what you make it.. I know that I have some "poems" that aren't in "poetic form" but to me it doesn't matter.. anyway you did a wonderful job in expressing your thoughts and how you feel about this.. I really like how you ask questoins and yet seem to answer them at the same time.. This was really intense as well.. I really enjoyed reading this.. Thank you very much for sharing this with us..
Angel
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I like your style of writing, This poem is meaningful in the sense of the questions about humanity, and also that there are answers to all the questions we have as long as we seek them. Nobody can tell one thing from another, for what is life, without death, despair, and tragedy, I like this poem very much.
Well Done, Keep writing shit like this,
Happy Writing
Zachary
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