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Girls Night Out

Friday night and we'd just got paid
The night had just begun
I put my cash in a purse I made
I knew we’d have some fun
Six Horny girls, we could not lose
We giggled and broke out the booze
Six Horny girls
Six Horny girls
We’re off on our Friday night cruise

A joint was rolled for us to smoke
It really was good shit
Passed it around, I took a toke
Then got a buzz from it
Blue lights appeared behind our car
And we hadn’t gone very far
Blue lights appeared
Blue lights appeared
This was all getting too bizarre

We slowed down and pulled to a stop
I soon felt sick inside
Then up walked this really cute cop
I think I could have died
“You’re speeding girls, this is not good”
“I waited for you as I should”
You’re speeding girls
You’re speeding girls
“We got here as quick as we could”

 

 

 

Author notes

Option #3


Trijan Refrain:
The Trijan Refrain, created by Jan Turner, consists of three 9-line stanzas, for a total of 27 lines. Line 1 is the same in all three stanzas, although a variation of the form is not to repeat the same line at the beginning of each stanza. In other words, the beginning line of each stanza can be different. The first four syllables of line 5 in each stanza are repeated as the double-refrain for lines 7 and 8. The Trijan Refrain is a rhyming poem with a set meter and rhyme scheme as follows:

Rhyme scheme: a/b/a/b/c/c/d,d refrain of first 4 words of line five /c

Meter: 8/6/8/6/8/8/4, 4 refrain/8
source: shadowpoetry.com

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  • BluesMan gold member
    August 10, 2008
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    Ah Memories of my youth and recreational use of lisit and illlisit substances was a fun thing to do Great rhyme though I had to read it a couple of time to get the rhythm Thank you for introducing me to "Trijan Refrain" I'll have to try to write one now

  • ecrivain01
    August 4, 2008
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    LOL ...

    this is clever.


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    July 11, 2008
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    Oh Sis, you utter nutcase!

    I rather like this.


  • JohnnyD gold member
    July 10, 2008

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    many years ago, before electricity perhaps, four gals who were friends of my brother and I, were at a friends house up in Deer Valley (North western Phoenix)rolling and smoking their own. well apparently they got pretty buzzed and had to get back to Southeast Phoenix before 6 Pm to return the car. So they got on I 17 and headed South. Robin was driving and everyone was warning her; "Don't speed, so we don't get stopped, don't speed. " So, she was very careful, but by the time they got to Bethany home road blue lights came on behind them and they were pulled over. The cops, two of them came to the car, one on each side and the one on the drivers side asked for ID and insurance, which Robin gave him. The cop then looked at the girls and back at Robin and said; "Do you know how fast you were going?" Robin said "65"? The cop says "No" Robin says "75"? Cop again says "No", Robin swallows hard and says "95"? The cop shook his head and said; "No, you were doing 12 miles an hour in the fast lane." And believe it or not they got off with a warning as the cops were apparently so bemused over it! I think it was 1963 or 64.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    July 10, 2008

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    Sounds like a good night out in my books!! lol... now I just wonder where things went from there!!

    You prove that form poetry can be used for any theme and come across brilliantly!!


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    July 10, 2008

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    Good evening ladies, driver license and registration please, now the reason I stopped is… Sound familiar?

    Loved this Amera, it shows your mischievous side, or you have a very vivid imagination.


  • pantress silver member
    July 9, 2008

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    This would have been great if the cute cop turned out to be a male dancer and the car and outfit were just props. Tha would have made six horny girls very happy, lol


  • PerVirtuous
    July 9, 2008

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    You certainly know how to capture my imagination! Mmmmm. This has much in it that is desirable: cash-flush horny girls, booze, a joint, a party, and most of all, you! Have some woozy bunnies. Call me.


  • Faeryn
    July 9, 2008

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    Oh my! So is this what you do on friday nights?? lol. Excellent write, mom. Cute cop, eh? Did you work your magic and get out of the ticket?
    Love,
    Tay


  • HaleyMary
    July 9, 2008

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    Awesome write, Sis. Sounds like a wonderful girls night out. Well, not so much the smoking, but the cute cop. That would make for a great night out, eh?

    Great write and best of luck in the contest.


  • StarEyes
    July 9, 2008

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    Oh Sis, what a read! Sounds like a great girls night out! Hey wait a minute! If I don't get to have a girls night out, then why do you What a fun read!

    Best of luck in this contest!

    and love

    Nyetta

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