Did you really believe I wanted to go down that path?
Did you really succumb to the chance...
That I was most likely never going back?
Shove my imperfections in my face
Tell me I’m worthless and not worth the time
So I’ll stay in this same place
Until my conscience is revived.
Did you really love me, or was I your “experimental” game?
Was it all part of the plan to push me around
To keep me bound & b/r/o/k/e/n to these chains
There's a fine line between good & bad
But you've taken a step too far
Putting in jeopardy everything I had
Who the hell do you think you are?
Did you really comprehend that I was doing oh, just fine?
So you wouldn't feel any guilt or shame
Were you planning to leave me behind?
Put another bruise on my fractured skin
Toss me around like a [xx.useless.xx] doll
& I'll await for the emotional [physical] pain to begin
You're the master of amorality, after all♥
A contest entry
- Title/Picture/Quote Prompt! Reserve and Write! Multiple Entries! by xxRainbowDawnxx.
700 points, ended July 22, 2008, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
pleassse tell me what you think :]
Comments
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wow
such strong and even angry emotions
this is a powerful piece, as if you were confronting the person (I would assume your "significant other" or someone of that category) for treating you this way
excellent poem
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So here I go, commenting all your zillion poems, AGAIN..*sigh* Whatta chore. HAHAHA JAYKAYMAY.
Anyways.
Ohemgeez. This is loverly.
*There's a fine line between good & bad
But you've taken a step too far
Putting in jeopardy everything I had
Who the hell do you think you are?*
Of course, my favoritest lines. Great write here my dear!
<333
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I had a fwb thing with my best friend through the last half of high school... and he treated me very similar to the words you have written here...
"Shove my imperfections in my face
Tell me I’m worthless and not worth the time
So I’ll stay in this same place
Until my conscience is revived. "
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"Shove my imperfections in my face" - man do I hear you about that one! This is very sad and I'm sorry if you really had to go through all that. I hope you're doing fine, and thanks for sharing
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ohmygosh
i really like this idea
its wonderful!!
i have so many favourite parts i mite as well just rewrite the poem tryin to list them haha
beautiful
goodluck in the contest<3 -
It's like what lex luthor says in smallville to clark I think it is, or it might be to ryan clarks psychic friend, 'there's not just black and white you know, there's shades of gray' and no I don't think anyone should expect you to be perfect, but people are quicker pointing out imperfections than the good sides. Shame really.
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Dang that was amazing I loved everything about it...personally I was just drawn to read something of yours from your name and I'm amazed to have found such an awesome writer who btw shares my best friends name...lol...but anyways I got of track I've had this emotional thing quite like this happen to me more than once so it just like WOW
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ooh wowie your really good at the dirty pretty form,
honestly this poem is amazing hun, i am sure you will do very good in the contest,
all my love,
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Since when did ya post this poemXD gosh you're on a roll I'm telling ya..
You've really go deep into this emotional twisted some what..risking a high chance to lose everything..even though you kow what's it's gonna be..sad piece...
Oh and love the bg it's pretty..
Keep penning!!!
Lieu
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I know ! I really am. I can't help it hahaha
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WOOT. Thanks yo 
haha
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lol your fingers must been smoking and burning right now
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Ohh, yes. For sure...
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I like this poem. =]
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Title: Beyond Good and Evil
Let me know if you want a different one if this one doesn't work for you
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works perfect. thanks again ! ♥
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