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Silent Hawk on seasoned wing
Soaring high on zephyrs tide
Radiant night, his heart doth sing
The glories of his future bride

Swift his press on careless prey
There's no pleasure in his take
Life for life prolongs his day
Quick these actions for his sake

But matters of the heart take time
This patient hawk knows how to wait
To rush its' season would be a crime
For it's never early, never late

Silent Hawk on tempered wing
Soars yet high on zephyrs rise
Knowing the appointed day will bring
The gift of his most cherished prize

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Knight70 silver member
    July 16
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    You had me with the first stanza.

    What an appreciation for all of nature's splendor! I really enjoyed how you made the first and last stanzas somewhat similar. It added to the rhythm of this piece. I really enjoyed your use of the Olde English word 'doth.' They had such a poetic way of speaking many centuries ago. Another beautifully written piece, Dennis.

    Don


  • Dark Otter
    August 8, 2008
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    I like! I like!

    I don't know why, I just do: Maybe because I like birds of prey, maybe because I like nature, maybe because I like the discerning eye, maybe because I've seen those moments of a hawk circling over a wildnerness lake from a high cliff. The magic of that moment escapes many. Thanks Dennis.


  • Polaja Greeters member
    August 8, 2008

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    I really like the way you have used such beautiful descriptions in this piece the graceful imagery really lends itself well to the tone of the poem - bringing a majestic tone to the whole thing

    Keep writing

    Polly


  • sailor ptolema
    August 7, 2008

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    i love the descriptiveness of this piece, and the fact that you don't need the picture to visualize it .

    -sailor ptolema


  • lowercase prelude gold member
    August 7, 2008
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    terrific imagery and your flow was good.
    superb poem

    also, i liked your word choice


  • Freed by Mercy silver member
    August 6, 2008
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    This is beautiful verse. wonderful imagery and flow. I enjoyed it very much!


  • azure85 gold member
    August 6, 2008

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    Very pretty poem, in honor of one that deserves it. Filled with the beauty of nature, and the touch of your gentle pen.


  • quantumsurveyor
    August 6, 2008

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    A delightful poem evoking nature in a special form - do I find a metaphor here for humankind? I enjoyed this read.

  • PureCountry
    August 6, 2008

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    Wonderfully Written,

    how he does pray for patience and not to rush that which may await him. Thanks for the entry.

    Niaish

    Silent Hawk


  • Spiritual Nature
    July 15, 2008

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    This is a delight and poignant read. I was...with the wind. Thank you for taking me there.

    BLESSINGS, Doris

  • Esmeralda Ponsonby
    July 10, 2008

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    Very thought out poem to match the picture of a most majestic bird. You describe his journey very well. Good luck with the contest.


  • ShelleyA gold member
    July 9, 2008

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    A beautiful write and presentation. Heartfelt. Good imagery, flow, rhyme and tone. Vivid descriptives. Very nice rhythm. Good word choice, alliteration and assonance. Well penned and much enjoyed. Best wishes in the contest.

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